Flash Back

September 20, 2010
A smile not hidden
Is my pain written
A laugh shown
Is a back stabbed
A hug given
Is a heart stolen
A tear fallen
Is a heart crashed

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A.Bekah.Girl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 2, 2010 at 3:09 pm

this is quite lovely.

i like the emotion.

i'm not sure about the last line. "a heart crashed" sounds a little awkward, and you are repeating heart. think about changing that line?

Nikkira3 replied...
Oct. 4, 2010 at 9:10 am
thank you! i would have never noticed that i repeated that.
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