Perfection MAG

September 1, 2010
By hanfan24 GOLD, Dexter, Michigan
hanfan24 GOLD, Dexter, Michigan
15 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is not the magnitude of your actions, but the amount of love you put into them that counts." Mother Teresa


I squint,
blinded by the cutting words
glinting off my shining plate.
Or is it my tears?
Forced back into my skull
where they fester
and boil
creating a bubbling mass
of pain and anger
ready to burst
behind my trembling eyelids.

I place a shaking hand
to my heart
where the blade of her words
still slices
twisting painfully as
she regards me
with a look of disgust
disappointed by the daughter
that failed to reach perfection.

My stomach lurching,
I push back from the table
stumbling to my room
and away from the sickly perfection
of a perfectly cooked meal
surrounded
by a smiling family –
the world unaware
of the frothing hatred
of our charade
that is brewing on
our sickeningly clean
oventop.



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on Aug. 18 2011 at 3:44 pm
FutureSceneQueen BRONZE, Amherst, Ohio
4 articles 14 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do what you love or die unhappy -m.shadows from avenged sevenfold

amazing.  i relate, i truelly love it. 

Alakazam said...
on May. 31 2011 at 9:45 pm
I can totally relate to this (:

hanfan24 GOLD said...
on May. 30 2011 at 7:50 pm
hanfan24 GOLD, Dexter, Michigan
15 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is not the magnitude of your actions, but the amount of love you put into them that counts." Mother Teresa

Thank you guys so much!

It means a lot(:


on May. 29 2011 at 12:01 pm
tayleeeeeeeer SILVER, Laplata, Maryland
5 articles 1 photo 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes good things fall apart, so better things can fall together.

I know allabout this .

I never knew hoe to describe how i felt when i did have these feelings and now i do . You portrayed the feelings perfectly . 5 stars <3


on May. 27 2011 at 9:05 am
Rinilove32 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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wow this gives a real insite to what you were feeling at the time.

BEAUTIFUL!!


Pooja11 BRONZE said...
on May. 27 2011 at 12:23 am
Pooja11 BRONZE, Montego Bay, Other
4 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see in the world."- Mahatma Gandhi

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!

on May. 26 2011 at 9:36 pm
savannah tranby, Hawarden, Iowa
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great job!!!!!!

on May. 26 2011 at 7:08 pm
sweetie1032 BRONZE, Dayton, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up life in three words....LIFE GOES ON"

This is beutiful :)

on May. 26 2011 at 2:43 pm
Faithful365 BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
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you are a really good writer. You depicted the feelings really well, it was as if it was happening to me as i read it.

Keep writing! :)


Aderes47 GOLD said...
on May. 26 2011 at 12:04 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

This reminds of Battle Hym of the Tiger Mother.

Great poem. :)


on May. 26 2011 at 11:36 am
Shortblueeyes224 DIAMOND, Auburntown, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Are We Happy Plastic People"- Casting Crowns "While we're sung to sleep by philosophies that save the trees and kill the children" - Casting Crowns "It's such a secret place, the land of tears"Antoine de Saint-Exupery

Great Job :). Keep it up!

on May. 26 2011 at 9:17 am
Wow! I felt the emotions ! very beautifully written

on May. 26 2011 at 8:33 am
noirelle SILVER, Texarkana, Arkansas
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amazing poem :-)




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