Oh Moon

Oh Moon,
Oh bright, bright Moon,
How can you move me so,
When you are many hundreds of miles away?
Your terrible beauty creeps
Through the night,
Pure as a cold mountain spring.

Sometimes I look upon your distant splendor,
And I find myself upon you.
I look about myself,
at the dust and the rocks that are gray as ash,
and marvel at how different you are when close.
The I turn toward the horizon,
and see a sight that takes my breath away.
The Earth.
I stare at this wondrous orb
That is made up of swirls of blue, green and white.
Stare until my eyes sting and I am forced to blink.
And I am back where I was,
Looking upon your far-away face.

Oh Moon,
Oh bright, bright Moon,
The Earth, with its constant change and possibilities,
Is infinitely more beautiful than you.





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iwillbeRISINGfromtheground said...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 8:17 pm
Wow. Im. amazed. :) that was fantastic and brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Raytheraym said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 10:16 pm
Wow, this is really good and original! I love how you start with admiring the moon and then change to earth. :)
 
BrightBurningCampeador This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 10:53 pm
Thanks! It's sort of like how I think trees are much prettier than emeralds.
 
Robyn97 said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 8:28 pm
I agree with Garnet77; you took something common and made it infinitely unique.
 
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 12:10 am
This is really good! I love poems that just describe something that's so common, and you did a wonderful job of it. :)
 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 5:21 pm
I agree with "thewriteidea" - you turned the moon into something almost magical! I love picturing this scenario in my mind. My interpretation is that you're so intrigued by the moon until you're turned around to see the earth. Seeing the earth makes you realize the moon distances itself because it cannot compete with the earth's beauty. Even if I got it all wrong, your writing skill is all RIGHT. :) Great imagery!
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 2:05 pm

very well written! you have a fabulous way of describing something. you make the moon, which seems to simple and mundane, sound so powerful and almost magical.

check out some of my work, too if you'd like. keep writing!

 
b_gomez114 replied...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 11:24 pm
this is great; kudos for the way you use your language to make the moon more than just an object, as you speak to it
 
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