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August 5, 2010
By Anonymous

The rich red liquid
burns as it slides down my throat
landing heavy and hard,
sloshing uncomfortably in my stomach.
I wanted it; I yearned for it
While it was sitting in front of me,
mocking me with its unbearable gravity.
I cracked under the weight
of the unseen force; In all my weakness
I imploded.
A black hole that eats what it hears
And ignores what it knows.
It leaves a foul taste in my mouth,
One that lingers much longer than anticipated.
I feel my cells soak up the poison,
but no matter how full of the deadly weapon,
they still ache for more.
In all of my dazed stupor
I fail to see the one thing that can quench
this soul shattering thirst
is pure and simple
H2O.

© Anonymous

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collegegirladventures GOLD said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 2:44 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
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VEry creative! I would have never guessed wine.
Katie_Grey DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 1:41 pm
Katie_Grey DIAMOND, Leipsic, Ohio
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it's wine, but metaphorically it's the world. whereas the water is God.
Katie_Grey DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 1:39 pm
Katie_Grey DIAMOND, Leipsic, Ohio
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haha, why are you sorry? don't be :)
collegegirladventures GOLD said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 1:23 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Ohhh...sorry. :/
Katie_Grey DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 6:06 am
Katie_Grey DIAMOND, Leipsic, Ohio
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I meant wine.
collegegirladventures GOLD said...
on Sep. 19 2010 at 6:45 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Wow!! This sure is a powerful metaphor. It's kind of funny, too.

Only one question: what did you mean when you mentioned the "red liquid"?