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Gather your stuff
And be very quiet
This is not a bluff
So dont start a riot

Open the door
And see the view
Do you want more?
I'll see what I can do

Hush, dont cry
Im saving your soul
I would not lie
Im not a bag of coal

So off we will fly
Into the light
Into the sky
Where everything is just right



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kat2.0 said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 12:24 pm:
I agree very mysterious but well written
 
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SpringRayynThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 12:52 am:
What I like best about this poem is that it is so mysterious. It could be about a relative, a friend, a boy/girlfriend, anyone really. Well, a suggestion from a teacher I once had: the word 'stuff' is really vague. Maybe the word 'belongings' would help that? I know it would be harder to find a rhyme for though.
 
SpringRayynThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 12:52 am :
(I like the part about 'saving your soul.' what does that mean?)
 
Kbuschan replied...
Jan. 1, 2011 at 5:33 pm :
just helping someone in need
 
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