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July 24, 2010
By carvedinwood BRONZE, Bayside, New York
carvedinwood BRONZE, Bayside, New York
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Favorite Quote:
one must still have chaos within oneself to be able to give birth to a dancing star
- Friedrich Nietzsche


'and i remember the truth
long novembers with you'
and as i hate the reflection,the eyes never blink
the harder they think, the sparkle dwindles and shrinks,
how do they take color or how they take lie
if they flash lighter as she starts to cry
widen, betrayed, if they'd smile again
how they'd react to a laugh, respond to a friend
they move down, red rimmed, to the shape of her lips
scarred by skin they touched, turned down by how they miss
they look back up, the image blurs, mind ablaze
that they can't meet their image, can't stare down its own gaze.
turning around and walking away would only leave me empty.
so i punch her, feel the glass rip my skin,
let the anger sweep over, as powerful as lust for a sin.


The author's comments:
So to pay my respects and also practice my on writing, be inspired, I take one/two lines from a song I worship at the moment and continue it by myself,however far it may take me. In this one, the first two lines are from Winter by Joshua Radin. I don't really know why I wrote the rest of it that way, I just did.

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on Aug. 23 2010 at 2:33 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

my favorite line is the ending: "let the anger sweep over, as powerful as lust for a sin." such intensity and meaning! you are a great writer

on Aug. 15 2010 at 9:01 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

I am speechless. This was beyond amazing. You have such an amazing gift, and you should be very proud of this piece. Your style is very similar to that of Robert Frost, and he is, in my opinion, one of the greatest poets ever. Well done, and I applaud you for such a marvelous work. 

I would really appreciate it if you could check out some of my work, if you ever get the chance. 


on Aug. 13 2010 at 11:19 am
SuicidalDreamer.. PLATINUM, Marshall, Illinois
31 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Drop The World....." Or "Everything Happens For A Reason....." Or "I am jealous of every woman that has ever hugged him, Cause for that mere second. They held my entire world."

Wow this poem is AMAZING! You inspired me so much...I love it you should really keep writing I will be looking for a new one ^^

on Aug. 12 2010 at 11:05 pm
sunrise_faerie GOLD, Fredericksburg, Virginia
11 articles 3 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
things are only as dark as you make them.
there is always beauty in every situation. look for it and you will see.
smile; sometimes it's all that will keep you from crying.

wow. great. the ending was VERY powerful.

on Aug. 12 2010 at 5:26 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

It seems to me to be a very passionate poem; I applaud you for that. It was well written, and I adored the last bit of the poem. Keep writing! :)


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