A City Filled With Tears

July 6, 2010
By Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have


Every tear represents a name,
and every name means something more.
Holding on to the never let go feeling.
Hoping that it stays in your soul.
Memories that will never fade,
with each second not cherished enough.
There will always be things you'll never get to say, and things you'll no more enjoy.
Though waking up is a little uneasy,deep down inside you know you must go on.
And when your tears finally stop bleeding... your hear will say it's ready to move along.


The author's comments:
Another one of my pieces that just sorta came to me...

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Nirvana SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 10:56 pm
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have

thanks for the honest feedback...i guess i didnt get my point across as well as i thought i did.

Whylime said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 10:35 pm
Whylime, Brentwood, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Grief is the price we pay for love -- Queen Elizabeth ll
Don't go there, I'll only follow -- ???
Why is a raven like a writing desk? -- The Mad Hatter from Alice in Wonderland
Chewing gum is really gross, chewing gum I hate the most -- Willy W.

I would like to second "never let go feeling" part. Was it a typo? am i reading it wrong? I liked it but really had to think to get a message out of it. love it darling, please continue to perfect your craft (:

Nirvana SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 10:17 pm
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have

thanks for the comment 899!

Nirvana SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 10:16 pm
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have

thank you jandee for giving me honest feedback. i like that.

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 7:46 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Very, very nice. I loved it. The only thing I might change is the wording in a few places. I got caught up while reading it at "the never let go feeling." (I don't know what I'd do with this. :/) and "things you'll no more enjoy." (I would just change it to "things you'll no longer enjoy". Idk, it just sounds better to me.) and "you know you must go on." (this one wasn't too bad and could be left).

Overall, I very much liked it. ♥


on Aug. 27 2010 at 6:20 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

oh my God, i loove the word choice... this is truly beautiful :)

Nirvana SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 5:56 pm
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have

thank you very much

on Aug. 27 2010 at 1:19 pm
amandap PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
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oh this was lovely! keep up the good work!

on Aug. 27 2010 at 12:37 pm
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND, Westerlo, New York
61 articles 36 photos 216 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I'm not"
"Somewhere betweeen us talking, you saying I deserve better, and you making me laugh when I wanted to cry, I fell in love with you."

I totally love this! This is so beautiful!!

Nirvana SILVER said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 9:46 pm
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have

THANK YOU VERY MUCH!

on Aug. 26 2010 at 9:07 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

Oh.My.Gosh. I love it so much! I haven't read a free verse poem that flowed this well in a LONG time! You got a really good talent, I hope you keep up the amazing writing! :)

Nirvana SILVER said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 11:44 am
Nirvana SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
9 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Until you accept who you are; you will never be happy with what you have

thanks...i will make sure to check yours out

 


on Jul. 28 2010 at 2:14 pm
crubs33 DIAMOND, Lido Beach, New York
58 articles 3 photos 750 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most courageous act is still to think for yourself. Aloud."- Coco Chanel
Life isn't about surviving the storm, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

This is so emotional!!! i love it!!!! if you could please rate and comment on my work that would be great!!! thanks and ur really good!!!


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