Standing on the Moon without a Spacesuit

June 3, 2010
By -Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton


I need a break.
Just a small one.
Not literally.
I don't want a broken foot
or something like that.
I'm not a masochist.
I just need some room to
breathe.
Like deep breathing.
The kind where you:
Inhale.
Hold it.
Exhale.
Relax.
Well,
that's what's supposed
to happen,
but most of the time
I just hold my breath
t o o l o n g
and end up gasping.
Not exactly what I would call
“relaxing”.
So, maybe,
I don't want to breathe deeply,
but I do need some room.
Just a little.
Just enough so that
I don't need to
think.
[Especially about
you.]


The author's comments:
I suppose the meaning of the title, 'Standing on the Moon without a Spacesuit', has to do with what would happen if you were on the moon without a spacesuit. You would literally suffocate and freeze to death. You wouldn't breath and the speaker can't breath (figuratively). I made up the title months before actually writing the poem. I keep a list of titles and was going through it when I came upon this one. I thought it sounded cool, so I wrote a poem to fit it.

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-Kal- GOLD said...
on Nov. 22 2010 at 8:39 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"
-Anonymous

Interesting poem Emie :)

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Nov. 22 2010 at 6:27 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Oh, wow. Thank you so much. That means a lot to me! I hope to eventually create a collection of poetry and make a book. :3

on Nov. 22 2010 at 4:26 pm
Alexandrathepoet PLATINUM, Leesville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
If nothing else, believe in art.
~Unknown

You are one of few poets who I like every poem of their's that I read, thanks for writing them!

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Oct. 8 2010 at 7:40 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

The most exciting thing about writing a poem is creating the title. :3

on Oct. 8 2010 at 6:59 pm
A.Bekah.Girl GOLD, Menlo Park, California
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i really like how casual this is. and that the title isn't quite obvious but still entirely fitting.

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 28 2010 at 8:34 am
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

youveleftmespeechless :: I'm glad you loved it! ((Isn't Gaga amazing? I actually had a dream I met her last night. Anyways, I love meeting other little monsters.))

 

Virabbit :: Thank you! The titles are my favorite part of writing my poems. :3


on Aug. 27 2010 at 11:25 pm
Virabbit SILVER, Bellingham, Washington
5 articles 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Kiss me and you will see how important I am.

I love all the titles you come up with, they're really unique! This poem's my favorite of yours, I definitely feel that way a lot. Keep writing, your work is really awesome! :)

on Aug. 27 2010 at 4:37 pm
I SUPER loved this poem! I liked the ending especially, because it answered the question at the end of whom the narrator was stressed about. It was really well written. P.S. I am a HUUUGEEE lady gaga fan too!

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:51 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Thank you very much. ♥

XCLover GOLD said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 9:01 pm
XCLover GOLD, Sandpoint, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"I know I run like a girl, try and keep up!" ~Anon
"You only ever grow as a human being if you are outside your comfort zone." ~Percy Cerutti
"The hug is incomplete without you :3" NinjaMan

I can relate to this with all the different kinds of pressure from other people's expectations of me. Not sure if that made sense, really tired right now. If it didn't, sorry! Otherwise, I love the way you write, keep it up!

on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:33 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Of course, of course.

. said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:23 pm
No problem. :)

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:08 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Thank you so much.

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:07 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Yes. Very different. -nods-

on Aug. 24 2010 at 7:03 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Hem hem. My bad. It was in BRACKETS.

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 6:53 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

[Actually, the "Especially about you." is in brackets. MAJOR difference.]

 

I love that you found it funny and enjoyed my poem. ♥


on Aug. 24 2010 at 5:51 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

That was so cute! I especially love the beginning, the whole thing with the "break".  That was really funny:D The style of this poem is interesting, and it definitely fits the mood.  The last part was really sweet, with the (especially about you) in parentheses.

. said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 5:49 pm
Yeah, I like the tiltle too. very unique. Good choice.

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:10 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Thank you very much. <3

-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:09 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

Thank you very much. And yes! Use those titles. A title is everything (at least to me).


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