Like Snow

May 25, 2010
By haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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Days flutter by like snowflakes,
Each slightly different from the next,
Traveling slowly to the ground,
And yet they seem to pass by in the blink of an eye,
Until they melt away and yet another falls.
Memories build up like snowmen,
Compacted of millions of moments and days,
Rolled together and shaped perfectly,
By tender hands and loving hearts,
Built to last.
Only the memories survive,
The rays of heat which arrive,
Along with bouquets of flowers and denim shorts,
Once springtime rolls along,
And winter melts away,
And grassy meadows break through the powdery mess.
Yes, the memories stay intact,
Cold and fresh,
Like golfballs scattered across a putting green.



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on Aug. 22 2010 at 12:54 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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thanks that means so much! i will definetely check out your work and feel free to look at some of my newer stuff that hasn't been commented on yett=]

on Aug. 19 2010 at 3:37 pm
ramnapotter PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Write to be understood, speak to be heard, read to grow...”

i think it's beautiful . especially the simile with the snowmen , 'memories build up like snowmen...' . i think you have a writing style all your own , and it shows through your writing . (: ahah , marvellous , hunn . feel free to check some of my stuff . think you might like it . (:

on Jul. 26 2010 at 3:37 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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Thank you! =]

on Jul. 26 2010 at 8:36 am
LondonEye DIAMOND, Randolph, New Jersey
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Love the imagery. :)

on Jul. 19 2010 at 4:49 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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thank you so much! that means alot considering what a great writer you are :) your work was amazing.

on Jul. 19 2010 at 4:44 pm
Aww thanks! :D

on Jul. 19 2010 at 3:25 pm
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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different and magical, it is great!

on Jul. 19 2010 at 2:39 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Thanks for commenting my work.

I appreciate it.

And this piece of yours is....fascinating. I love how you compared the days to snowflakes. Very beautiful. Keep writing dear. 


on Jul. 9 2010 at 9:51 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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thank you! <3

on Jul. 9 2010 at 8:30 pm
LondonEye DIAMOND, Randolph, New Jersey
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You're quite a poet! :)

on Jul. 1 2010 at 9:48 am
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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you're amazing haha thanks so much! i'll definetely check out  your work when it gets posted :D

on Jul. 1 2010 at 8:50 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

This is AMAZING. I love all the similies and metaphors too! It is really creative and a really interesting way of looking at life. I have a couple poems like this pending - will you check them out when they're posted?

on Jun. 28 2010 at 2:59 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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aww thanks! it actually was for an english assignment where we had to use metaphors and stuff but i tweeked it alot:)

on Jun. 28 2010 at 12:12 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

I love all the similies and metaphors you used in this poem, and it's a simply beautiful poem.

on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:41 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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thankyou!i loved your poem too haha

on Jun. 27 2010 at 4:40 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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thanks i appreciate it:)

on Jun. 23 2010 at 9:41 pm
mackadoodle30 BRONZE, Albemarle, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Dreams come true. Without that possibility, nature would not incite us to have them."

I love this poem, especially all the images I see when reading it! It's really good. :)

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on Jun. 23 2010 at 3:58 pm
BABe724 BRONZE, Kaukauna, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"...It's not to late it's never to late. No one will ever see the side reflected and if there's something wrong who would have guessed it..."

wow, this is really good. I feel the same way.


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