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Listen here and you will hear!
your past hist’ry is to fear
Listen here and listen near
you’d be right to want to know
where (about) that you should go
I haven’t a clue, but turn your ears
turn your eyes; look in mirrers
see beyond, look, the features
of all the many diff’rent creatures
what makes you the very best
if all the rest are just oppressed?

You’ll be alone – among many men,
a sea of monsters, you’d call them then,
you’ll look away and your back’ll burn
by heavy moonlight, and back you’ll turn
your scars showing, heavy with concern
so ocean waves will draw to you
and wash over the others too.
close your eyes. embrace it.
look around, and face it
clouds of silence will cling to you now
as no other man can talk anyhow
will you still be the very best
if all the rest are no longer oppressed?



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Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2010 at 10:07 pm:
wow, I will defeinitely have to check out that poem... did you try out the rhythm, structure and eveything? the pic goes great with it as well... read some of mine?
 
ayaman (the author) replied...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 10:41 am :
I used the same number of lines and basically the same structure and tone. It was really fun to write, actually, and the originial poem (by Poe) is really good.
 
Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 9:04 pm :
awesome, pastiche in the right hands is incredible, and this is really good... you should do it again!
 
ayaman replied...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 11:42 pm :
haha thanks, and i know i just posted on one of your poems that i didnt like questions as endings for poems, but just so as not to be hypocritical, Poe uses the question in his poem, so naturally trying to mimick the form in his poem, I did the same
 
Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 15, 2010 at 9:27 pm :
each poem is different, with different heartbeats which thrive for different things, whether it be a question on the end or a solid statement... it's just dependent on the reader... it's alright to be a hypocrite too :)
 
ayaman replied...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 10:48 pm :
haha thanks, but that would make me a hypocrite, as i have a passionate disliking for hypocrites
 
Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 17, 2010 at 4:35 pm :
ahh, the troubles of the world... ;)
 
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