Prison

May 18, 2010
By thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."


My fingers curl around the bars
My nose squished in between the slots
These barriers
These prisons.
I'm tired of feeling unwanted
Of looking down and seeing
that black and white striped shirt.
My feet are chained to this cell
This prison cell that holds my soul.
I want to break out and scream
But I know
I won't even hear an echo in return.



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Susie Miller said...
on Oct. 9 2010 at 3:21 pm
Susie Miller, Pleasanton, California
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what a great metaphor! the ending is especially powerful. not even hearing an echo in return....

wonderful


on Oct. 4 2010 at 9:32 pm
StillDreaming GOLD, Flower Mound, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“There is nothing more dreadful than the habit of doubt. Doubt separates people. It is a poison that disintegrates friendships and breaks up pleasant relations. It is a thorn that irritates and hurts; it is a sword that kills.” -Buddha

prisons are always a good symbol. you did a nice job of portraying it :)

on Aug. 31 2010 at 6:04 pm
hollyhottell DIAMOND, Redding, California
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Favorite Quote:
poetry is a diary written out loud

yah thx to you to lol

on Aug. 31 2010 at 5:49 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

thx! and i'll for sure check out some of your stuff

on Aug. 31 2010 at 5:40 pm
hollyhottell DIAMOND, Redding, California
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Favorite Quote:
poetry is a diary written out loud

hey thanks alot...and i wanted to say i have been writing poetry since i was 8 to lol i to get my emosions out when i write..all of my poetry relates to me in some way...i really like this poem and often feel that way....great job....ill keep checking out ur work if you check out mine...by the way i rated it 5 stars...great job

on Aug. 28 2010 at 3:12 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

yeah, the whole poem is supposed to be a metaphor of being trapped alone

on Aug. 24 2010 at 1:23 pm
evrycloudyday7 PLATINUM, Wappingers Falls, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"As is a tale, so is life: not how long it is, but how good it is, is what counts." Seneca
"I'll just read a book instead. I don't care if we're just friends. I can hang out with myself I'm old enough now to pretend. Bam ba dum ba dum ba dum." kate n

there is a real sense of loneliness in this poem and a strong sense of being constrained almost... emotionally? i dont know if i got that right, but this is good! nice work!

on Jul. 10 2010 at 3:42 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

That was good , keep it up :) PLease come and check and rate my work

 



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