only the sun that saw

May 15, 2010
By Anonymous

A bright Flash
Of colors more
No one else saw
The sun alone
saw the death of the girl
As she died alone
with out a family
a friend
but she remains
for she has died in her heart
She has died alone.

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anaisp15 GOLD said...
on Jun. 30 2010 at 5:54 am
anaisp15 GOLD, Batavia, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
And in the music we find ourself

 i like it a lot. the only thing is 1.the title is a little misleading it might have been more straight forward if it was only the sun saw. and 1 question are you planning on dying with the sun as your only witness?

on Jun. 7 2010 at 4:03 pm
still-a-novice BRONZE, Balderdash, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Attention people! This is life here! This is not a rehersal. I repeat, Life is not a Rehersal!

I know that it's not very good, but I was just wondering what you would think and what i should add so my better work is even better.



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