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Summer Dance

May 6, 2010
By MPradical BRONZE, Cupertino, California
MPradical BRONZE, Cupertino, California
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Close my eyes and I believe,
in shadowed lanes and subtle melodies.
This rhythm that rises from the depths of the silence, like Lazarus,
from Bethany.
Powers called on by the spoken words, like trinkets dancing,
twirling, such vanity.
Descending unbid the summer shimmers, calling,
luring the unaware world in her siren arms, enveloping.

Our fingers graze like wind-swept waves,
each locking and passing,
passing and locking,
so that at no moment is there uniformity.
But then we too,
We two like trinkets dancing, twirling,
such vanity.

Harnessing the movements,
shifting forms and congruity,
and feeling this hunger and we look higher,
to the cold pressed stars in their indifference,
intelligence.
Then a final step, a last movement,
your hair in their waning light falls back,
graceful,
and I lean close…


The author's comments:
Inspired by a girl I met. Hope you enjoy it, and your summer be blessed with romance.

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doormatt said...
on Nov. 18 2010 at 1:31 am
have seen better, but not many!

on Nov. 18 2010 at 1:30 am
I like your style.

liiihsi said...
on Nov. 18 2010 at 1:29 am
wish you wrote more poems...

ubermuf said...
on Nov. 18 2010 at 1:26 am
interesting poem

on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:21 pm
this is pretty romantic. 

on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:03 pm
I love it! Please write more! XD

on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:01 pm
wow...better than my lit class man

jedidog said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:56 pm
awesome! keep writing

OMGmason said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:54 pm
not too shabby man. didn't know u could write so damn good

thedino said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:44 pm
great poem!  I really liked it =)

Stitch said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:26 pm

I really like it! Especially the ending, I like the way it trailed off. 

And the imagery is well written too. It's very dream-like and soft- which is a good thing. (:


lonerwolf said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:18 pm
this was a really good poem. i showed the measure of the movement and the syntax. the imagery is subtle but powerful. it is clever and avoids cliches. 

chodemasster said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:17 pm
I'm not sure I agree with the picture but it's legit

on Jun. 3 2010 at 1:14 pm
I'm not really one for love poems, but surprisingly well done.