Unnamed Flame

May 3, 2010
By Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"


Lighter, lights her on fire, lights are on fire, with a smaller flame the passion’s just the same, just as strong, strength, the way we’re liftin weight of the world, dropped in pain, pain-t and Wayne paintings display the world in pain, that girl in flames, a whirl wind phase. Nothing makes sense, always felt empty so full of mistakes, broken, she bakes in the heat left to fade in defeat. Lost a name once you’re beat, charred like black coal, bars black and cold, left torn, old clothes, old, close.

The author's comments:
I'm not sure what I think of it, but judging my own writing will only get me as far as the end of my notebook.

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on Jul. 20 2010 at 10:07 pm
Meganchristine BRONZE, Millville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"You can do no wrong in the eyes of a follower"

“To accomplish great things, we must not only act, but also dream; not only plan, but also believe.”

You're about as good as you believe you are.. Keep writing Don't lose hope even if no one comments

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:46 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I just got about 4 new poems up. I would appreciate it if you'd take the time to read, Comment and even rate them? I'd like to know if I"m really any good. Thanks so much!

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:45 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I just got about 4 new poems up. I would appreciate it if you'd take the time to read, Comment and even rate them? I'd like to know if I"m really any good. Thanks so much!

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:45 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I just got about 4 new poems up. I would appreciate it if you'd take the time to read, Comment and even rate them? I'd like to know if I"m really any good. Thanks so much!

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:44 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I just got about 4 new poems up. I would appreciate it if you'd take the time to read, Comment and even rate them? I'd like to know if I"m really any good. Thanks so much!

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:44 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I just got about 4 new poems up. I would appreciate it if you'd take the time to read, Comment and even rate them? I'd like to know if I"m really any good. Thanks so much!

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2010 at 5:43 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I just got about 4 new poems up. I would appreciate it if you'd take the time to read, Comment and even rate them? I'd like to know if I"m really any good. Thanks so much!

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jun. 16 2010 at 2:36 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

Thank you all so much, your comments mean a lot to me.

It's better to get opinions from people without any personal connection with you.


Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jun. 16 2010 at 2:34 pm
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

Thanks girl

on Jun. 16 2010 at 1:40 pm
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
22 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It's to dumb to see or say you'll still sing it, and I'll just cue the applause" - Marilyn Manson

This is very unique! I really like it. You have some good emotion in there, as well as a great imagination, and great thinking.

Good job! :)


on Jun. 16 2010 at 12:35 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

I loved it:) It was very emotional and descriptive nice work:)

on Jun. 16 2010 at 12:06 pm
RedvinesWTHCantTheyDo GOLD, Zephyrhills, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You make one more comment like that I will wrap you in a tortilla shell and eat you as a snack, maybe with some nice pico de gillo."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship
"If you don't die for something, I'll kill you for nothing."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship

Wow, I love it, I love the unusual way the words flow together. It's unique. You are very talented.

kristin19 said...
on Jun. 16 2010 at 11:31 am
THAT WAS GREAT. (:

on Jun. 16 2010 at 11:26 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

yes yes:)) i sense the imagination n i feel the expressiveness in this, like the comment below:) i totally loved ur word choice^^ it was a very emotional piece, good workk

on Jun. 16 2010 at 2:43 am
SnehaChatterjee PLATINUM, Kolkata, West Bengal, India, Other
45 articles 2 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
Two roads diverged in the woods and I,
I took the one less travelled by,
And that has made all the difference

Gr8 sense of imagination, expressions n thinking, simply awesome!

on Jun. 16 2010 at 2:11 am
ILikePersonificaition, River Hills, Wisconsin
0 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"So it goes"

your use of word play is stupendous, I love the way you do this. The way you move from one sound to another while simultaneously evolving your idea is incredible. this is one of the best poems I've read on here, I want to read more!!!


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