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The Snake came up
And bit me
I did not know why
But it did

Its teeth in me
Wouldn't stop attacking
And the venom
Ran through my blood

The venom ignited fire
That boiled rage
And the rage did nothing
I grew helpless

Until Hatred took over
It killed my heart
It killed my soul
It killed the snake



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IMAdreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 1, 2012 at 4:34 pm:

wonderfully crafted.... marvelous.... kinda creepy.... my favorite part is the ending....

pS. will u please check out my work? id love some feedback

=:D

 
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XxBVBGRLxX said...
May 19, 2010 at 10:55 pm:
This is a great poem. I love the ending - It killed my heart. It killed my soul. It killed the snake. Beautiful ending!!
 
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Shabria said...
May 19, 2010 at 3:58 pm:

This peom is wonderful!!! Keep writting poetry. I would love to read more of them.

 

 
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margierose This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 19, 2010 at 3:07 pm:
Wow that's amazing!!! Keep writing you have real talent. Would you mind reading mine? 
 
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inspir3dThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 19, 2010 at 12:35 pm:
wow. this is incredible!!! rare talent right here :)
 
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dianaforfree said...
May 19, 2010 at 10:55 am:
goodness! this is pure wonder. i love i love love. i love the words and the way you use them. i love the image, so very deep. wondrous.
 
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bkcrider92 said...
May 19, 2010 at 10:42 am:
I really like this! If you can please check out my poem Memories and let me no wat you think and rate it =)
 
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dominicana said...
May 18, 2010 at 7:52 pm:
i really enjoyed this poem i liked how you showed that hatred is such a strong emotion 5 star
 
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paranormaluv said...
May 18, 2010 at 4:23 pm:

Haha imagine if the snake and the speaker represented two people, like person A and person B. Then it would be like, person A did something bad to person B and wouldn't stop, so person B started to develop that rage and hate. 

I love this poem, it could be interpreted so many different ways!

 
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Eilatan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 18, 2010 at 3:30 pm:
i love the ending.
 
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macfire82 said...
May 18, 2010 at 1:22 pm:
wow awesome really litral means. so much to me and true good job.
 
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SafeleoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 18, 2010 at 1:49 am:
I like snakes! But other than that, really good poem.
 
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Ale_18 said...
May 17, 2010 at 11:10 am:
This is really good :D good job!! lol u should check my stuff out
 
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bgrat said...
May 17, 2010 at 7:33 am:
I like this alot, it really shows your emotion toward the snake.
 
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Patience97 said...
May 16, 2010 at 8:34 pm:
I love this. It shows how the snake attacked aimlessley. To kill, rather to kill one. It wasn't aiming for anyone in particular, just someone... great poem. Truthful.
 
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mariahLynn This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 16, 2010 at 1:34 pm:
this is really good. you should cheack out some of my work
 
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hollyhottell said...
May 16, 2010 at 11:49 am:
hey this is good... normally i only like poetry that rymes in a certain way... but i liked this poem. good job... check out my work
 
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