Forever Destroyed

April 14, 2010
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Forever is the water washing up onto the shore;
crawling up over the sand,
until quietly retreating back
into its home.
Forever is a summer night;
walking in the shadows,
feeling warm air swarm around you
like a sweet, never-ending caress.
Forever is the snow;
quivering from the gray mass of clouds,
soaring in circles with this cool, blistery air
that’s biting at the surface.
Forever is a mask;
placed over your eyes,
making the exterior a shadow,
a shadow that casts its existence down the street.
Forever is a broken ankle;
twisted, sprained, torn,
broken not only in the bone,
limping its way through life.
Forever is the sun on the horizon;
so much potential,
too many expectations,
just enough hope,
to keep you going.
Forever is anything you want it to be;
until it gets destroyed.





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Susie M. said...
Oct. 9, 2010 at 3:26 pm
wow, the ending just totally wow-ed me. every time i open up another poem i think to myself that it couldnt possibly get better. and then...it does. just..wow. perfect
 
LaurenJane said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 8:22 pm
You literally have me yearning for more! This is an absolutely amazing piece, with beautiful imagery, and emotion simply washing over the reader in waves. You really understand how to connect with your audience!
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 1:51 pm
thanks -- that means a lot to me!
 
Olajide said...
Aug. 28, 2010 at 10:09 pm
I really don't know what to say about the potential of this poem. I might be underestimating it if I said it was excelent. It is muc more than that. I am a poetry critique, so of all the poem I'd encounter, I think this one is among the best...not blushing. Nice work, very original. Giving it 5 stars.
 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 1:52 pm
wow!! that just made my day, thanks so much!
 
Brokenlover said...
Aug. 26, 2010 at 1:19 am

My tears are making my vision blurry, hopefully I dont have typos :) 

This is so amazing! I have felt like this so many times! Please dont stop writing, you are gracing this world with your talent! 

 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 1:53 pm
aww, thank you
 
wind.and.rain.again said...
Aug. 24, 2010 at 2:45 pm
wow. i loved this poem!! i agree with what Ally25 said: it is intense. but it adds to the message. i especially liked and connected with the last part "Forever is the sun on the horizon...etc". never stop writing!
 
Ally25 said...
Jun. 10, 2010 at 5:38 pm

Wow this was realy good I liked it alot...but it was kind of intence...at least i thought so...

 

 

 
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