Forever Destroyed

April 14, 2010
By thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."


Forever is the water washing up onto the shore;
crawling up over the sand,
until quietly retreating back
into its home.
Forever is a summer night;
walking in the shadows,
feeling warm air swarm around you
like a sweet, never-ending caress.
Forever is the snow;
quivering from the gray mass of clouds,
soaring in circles with this cool, blistery air
that’s biting at the surface.
Forever is a mask;
placed over your eyes,
making the exterior a shadow,
a shadow that casts its existence down the street.
Forever is a broken ankle;
twisted, sprained, torn,
broken not only in the bone,
limping its way through life.
Forever is the sun on the horizon;
so much potential,
too many expectations,
just enough hope,
to keep you going.
Forever is anything you want it to be;
until it gets destroyed.



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Susie Miller said...
on Oct. 9 2010 at 3:26 pm
Susie Miller, Pleasanton, California
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wow, the ending just totally wow-ed me. every time i open up another poem i think to myself that it couldnt possibly get better. and then...it does. just..wow. perfect

on Oct. 3 2010 at 1:53 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

aww, thank you

on Oct. 3 2010 at 1:52 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

wow!! that just made my day, thanks so much!

on Oct. 3 2010 at 1:51 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

thanks -- that means a lot to me!

on Aug. 30 2010 at 8:22 pm
LaurenJane PLATINUM, Canton, Illinois
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You literally have me yearning for more! This is an absolutely amazing piece, with beautiful imagery, and emotion simply washing over the reader in waves. You really understand how to connect with your audience!

Olajide BRONZE said...
on Aug. 28 2010 at 10:09 pm
Olajide BRONZE, Lanham, Maryland
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I really don't know what to say about the potential of this poem. I might be underestimating it if I said it was excelent. It is muc more than that. I am a poetry critique, so of all the poem I'd encounter, I think this one is among the best...not blushing. Nice work, very original. Giving it 5 stars.

on Aug. 26 2010 at 1:19 am
Brokenlover GOLD, Albany, Oregon
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My tears are making my vision blurry, hopefully I dont have typos :) 

This is so amazing! I have felt like this so many times! Please dont stop writing, you are gracing this world with your talent! 


on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:45 pm
wind.and.rain.again BRONZE, Amherst, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"What is it you wish to do with your one wild and precious life?" Mary Oliver

wow. i loved this poem!! i agree with what Ally25 said: it is intense. but it adds to the message. i especially liked and connected with the last part "Forever is the sun on the horizon...etc". never stop writing!

Riley141 GOLD said...
on Jun. 10 2010 at 5:38 pm
Riley141 GOLD, Yale, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
" Always do right. This will gratifiy some people and astonish the rest." Mark Twain

Wow this was realy good I liked it alot...but it was kind of intence...at least i thought so...

 

 



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