I'll tell her

April 8, 2010
I’ll tell her that she’s beautiful

I’ll tell her she’s the only one

I’ll tell her that she’s so smart

More radiant than the sun

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I’ll tell her that I love her

Because she loves to hear it

I’ll show her that I love her

But I don’t have to cuz she knows it


I’ll play her the music
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That always fills my heart

“It reminds me of you” I sing

“And I knew it from the start”


I’ll tell her she’s the best

The spark of my fire
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I’ll tell her that she fuels

The flame of my desire


I’ll tell her that I’ll write

To her endlessly

I’ll promise to always call
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To fill her heart with glee





I’ll tell her to be happy

And that everything is going to be okay

I’ll comfort her when she’s sad

And make all the bad things go away

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I’ll tell her that I need her

That it’ll never be the same

I’ll tell her that I love her too

And that I’m always the one to blame



I’ll never tell her I hate her
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And I’ll never do her wrong

I just want her approval

All I want is for us to be strong



I’ll tell her that she’s great

And that she’s a marvelous person
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I’ll tell her she’s the best

Beyond means of deductive reason


I’ll tell her I’m so happy

To have her as a friend

But I am even happier
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That I can love her in the end





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sleeplessdreamer said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 2:59 pm
The rhyming and flow need some work, I'm not going to lie. But, plz tell me your a guy, because I think I'm in love with you after this piece... seriously. Haha :)
 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse replied...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 10:02 pm

haha  

I read it for my poetry slam:)  didn't win but everyone loved it   haha

yeah i'm a guy   and i'm single;)  lol

 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse replied...
Jul. 27, 2010 at 10:06 pm
oh yeahh... go down a couple comments and read the revised version of the second stanza  lol it's so much better
 
. replied...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 6:34 am
yep... you're right... that revised stanza is much better... haha
 
. replied...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 6:36 am

yeah, that flows a lot better (the revised stanza that is). To be honest, I'm super annoying with my comments and I search for things to critique on. It's not that I'm trying to be mean, I just really want to help people make their work better. Cuz I like when people do that with mine.

I really like the meaning of this poem to.... obviously... ;)

 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse replied...
Oct. 9, 2010 at 1:54 am

Thanks:)

and I don't mind about the critique, it's helpful, thanks. 

 
Fat cow said...
May 30, 2010 at 9:25 pm
this sounds lyk sumtin everyone can relate to.  haha keep writin, ur poems r awsome
 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse replied...
May 30, 2010 at 9:26 pm
thanks 
 
hxcRocker said...
May 6, 2010 at 4:48 am
It's great but it sucks that you can't change the one part that you changed for the slam. If i were you then i would post a comment with the edited version in it
 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse replied...
May 7, 2010 at 10:43 pm

yeahhh...

the new version is 

I’ll tell her that I love her

Because it’s what she loves to hear

I’ll show her that I love her

And tell her that I always need her near

 
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