Some Can't See

March 15, 2010
By Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.


I smell chocolate covered cries
Falling from crystal coated eyes
I am blinded by the light
The light is blinded by the lies.
I can’t hear the phone when it rings
But I hear birds sing after they die.
Your tears run just like a river
These wounds run too deep to mend
I’ve tried my best to make it better
But you always break where I can’t bend
I sit amidst all my mistakes
I always learn when it’s too late
All the pieces erode in the weather
Chipped and brittle from the start
I try my best to out them together
That’s when everything falls apart


I smell crystal frosted eyes
Drenched in candy coated tears
I can’t see you through the smoke
And I can’t see you when it clears
And when these memories fade to gray
Everything else will fade away
Under the sun I melt into gold
Under the sun you learned to fold
And under it all we both pretend
That what we have wont fade away
I would eagerly fight off the night
If it meant that I could stay for a day
And even if you chose to forgive me
I would still be sitting here
Chewing on licorice flavored lies
Crying candy coated tears.



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. said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 9:59 pm
U dont know know whether not it flows cause u dont know what im saying

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 5:11 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Like you said, it doesn't flow. ;)

. said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 3:16 pm
Why so?..........

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 4:38 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

The only line I think you need to fix is 'But I hear birds sing after they die' :)

on Sep. 22 2011 at 11:12 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Actualism I need to delete this sucker and do it again cause it dont flow.MERCI TRES BEAUCOUP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 4 2011 at 12:11 am
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

I liked the second stanza a lot! A LOT! I love reading, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT! :)

But not the first. Sorry! :(


on Aug. 10 2010 at 11:25 am
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Good, somebody does :-)

on Aug. 8 2010 at 9:18 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

I can appreciate that.

on Aug. 6 2010 at 11:51 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

I call it dreamwalking.  Cause obviously, you're having a dream while walking, and I know you're also sleeping, but why call it what everyone else calls it?  Dreamwalking sounds more...dreamy.

on Aug. 5 2010 at 11:05 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

uh correctiopn. its called sleepwalking. do your dance, do. your dance. dance dance dance.

on Aug. 4 2010 at 5:26 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

correction...it's called dreamwalking.

on Aug. 3 2010 at 2:37 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

no, actually, dreaming would be thinking something without realizing that youre thinking it. youre not doing anything captain, because you're dreaming. after studying dreamflashes' obsession, boos now also feels the need to obsess over minor things.

on Aug. 2 2010 at 6:08 am
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Whatever, I'm just trying to ride the river's rapids rightly...boos realizes that you can do something without realizing what you're doing.  It's called dreaming.

on Jul. 29 2010 at 9:28 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

if we were doing our dances you wouldnt have this feeling youre having. dreamwriter went from "what dance?" to "i'm doing my dance!" which made booses' eyes water. boos winked, for thy just knew that dreamwriter would also make one of these bold itallic thingy's...

on Jul. 29 2010 at 5:18 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

I'm doing my dance!  Can't you see me?

on Jul. 28 2010 at 4:49 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

thats probrably just some psychological effect due to us not doing our dance captain.

on Jul. 26 2010 at 4:32 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

I suppose...but then how would we feel when we find out all that we've worked our lives to really wasn't that great at all?

on Jul. 26 2010 at 1:42 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

well we have to get rid of that conundrum dont we captain?

on Jul. 18 2010 at 8:05 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Haha like in Madagascar when the penguins were trying to get to Alaska, and they finally get there, and they just stand there in the wind and the snow until one of them turns around and says to the other guys "Well, this sucks!"

on Jul. 18 2010 at 6:13 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

so its like "hey, this is exactly what I wanted...(silence) ...well, how about that...."


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