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Feel the air on my body, hot as if someone were breathing on me…
I lay still on the tiles outside, yet I see movement and pickup a vibe…
Feel the world around me close my eyes, touch surface and imagine even bluer skies…
I lay still on the tiles chest moving slow, loose all concern for the troubles that grow…
Feel the energy buzz all around, relax with silence or listen to sound…
I lay still on the tiles where daydream overwhelm, semi-conscious but in my own realm…
Feel the air not me, feel the worlds own integrity…
I lay still on the tiles pretending I am air, because air is free and cannot care…
Feel the thinking the thought, a statement that becomes caught…
I lay still on the tiles biting my nails, fear of feelings think details…
Feel the feelings I didn’t want to touch, you start thinking and thinking it starts to hurt too much…
I lay still on the tiles I am invisible and do not exist, so feel my wrath take my fist…
Feel the hidden emotions the unimportant the forgotten, the truth comes out of the mind that’s rotten…
I lay still on the tiles not making sense, lay still on the tiles no defense…
Feel the confusion, the multiple viewpoints an optical illusion…
I lay still on the tiles distance shades and time, all included in this picture running through my mind…
Feel the music the dance the tunes, the dreams the realities these thoughts that consume…
I lay still on the tiles not listening to what I feel, I am alive but am I real?




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xlivelaughlove This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 14, 2010 at 9:49 am:

Returning the favor by checking out one of your poems. :D

"I lay still on the tiles pretending I am air, because air is free and cannot care…"

Definitely my FAVORITE line in an amazing poem ! (: I thought it was reallyyy emotional, and the sway of the meter had a very lullaby feel to it. Was incredible. Keep it up. <3

 
CarolynQ replied...
May 18, 2010 at 10:28 pm :
thanks for the positive feedback!! :D 
 
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hxcRocker said...
May 3, 2010 at 3:26 am:
really love your poem. Love the idea, emotion, and the skill it takes to put those into words
 
CarolynQ replied...
May 3, 2010 at 3:12 pm :
Thankyou for noticing the time and effort I put into this :]
 
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Metree This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 2, 2010 at 3:29 pm:
this is so good! you have such a talent for rhyming! keep adding more work :) 
 
CarolynQ replied...
May 2, 2010 at 5:12 pm :
thankyou ! I  most def. will keep putting up work :) writing is my passion!
 
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amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse said...
Apr. 29, 2010 at 8:38 pm:
you're writing is beautiful.. very haunting and it just stays in my mind.. again I love your writing.. so true and deep
 
CarolynQ replied...
Apr. 30, 2010 at 10:46 pm :
thanks so much :) it means alot to me
 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse replied...
May 1, 2010 at 1:42 am :
yepp:) anytime
 
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Darla Johnson said...
Apr. 22, 2010 at 11:03 am:
Well Done! Come check out my work i think you would like it!
 
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Milo! said...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 7:55 pm:
I really like this. I especially love how each line ends with an ellipsis. And thanks for commenting on my work!
 
CarolynQ replied...
May 2, 2010 at 5:29 pm :
Anytime and thankyou for checking my work out :)
 
Bill M. replied...
Jun. 20, 2011 at 10:34 pm :
This poem was incredible! Very intense and had me on the edge of my seat throughout! So great.
 
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