Sparkling

March 10, 2010
By thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."


A fraction
of the ocean
is lit up.
Gleaming,
Glistening,
Sparkling.

The sun,
is hiding,
but marking
its presence
by mirroring
its image,
in reflection.
Gleaming,
Glistening,
Sparkling.

Glancing,
it flickers,
and jumps
to my eyes;
never moving,
it lies there,
sprawled across.
Gleaming,
Glistening,
Sparkling.


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on Jun. 27 2010 at 11:26 am
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

i suppose this one doesn't have a specific message. it's more for the image and visual it creates

on Jun. 27 2010 at 11:25 am
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

haha i like your comment! (the format)

on Apr. 23 2010 at 3:31 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

beautiful word choice:DDDDDDDDDDD

on Apr. 21 2010 at 9:21 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

your poem

is very creative.

glistening

sparkling

on my

computer screen.

very nice.


jill456 said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 10:37 pm
you create a beautiful image in this poem. i can really visualize the scene you describe. i've only been to an ocean once when i was little, but after reading this, i feel like i've been there! very nice job...

on Apr. 11 2010 at 2:35 am
Sarita15 BRONZE, San Jose, California
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Favorite Quote:
Anyone perfect must be lying / Anything easy has its costs / Anyone plain can be lovely / Anyone loved can be lost

This is excellent, I love the imagery and the repetition at the end of every stanza tying it all together :)

PrezLover101 said...
on Mar. 30 2010 at 6:52 pm
What's the message for this one? I dont see it. Help me out please!

Jan-o Wizard said...
on Mar. 28 2010 at 6:59 pm
Your poetry has nice variety to it. You're not simply reusing the same poem each time. I like how this one keeps returning to the same three magical words, "Gleaming, Glistening, Sparkling." Each one is full of imagery, and together they enable us to easily "see" the vision in your head.


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