When I'm gone, do not sorrow

February 1, 2010
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When I'm gone,
do not sorrow.
For I am still here-
waiting, watching,
Don't worry.
There's no need to say goodbye.

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Nikiblue said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 8:29 pm
This is good but a little short. What you put in the quotes would have been a good addition to the poem. Keep up the good work (:
astheworldturns replied...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 7:14 am
Thanks! I appreciate it.
BobbysGirl replied...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 8:39 pm
Yeah, Like again Niki is right...i think it would be better if it was longer an if you added what you put in the quotes! :} but i still like it too :}
HeronHero replied...
May 12, 2010 at 1:43 am
I agree you need to dive deeper!:)
Muffy replied...
May 12, 2010 at 4:36 pm
Awesome, thanks for the comments, y'all! I really appreciate them. :)
Schnoodlebear replied...
May 15, 2010 at 11:16 am
I agree with Nikki too. It is already a great poem. But if you added some of the qoute it would make it an amazing poem!
Muffy replied...
May 15, 2010 at 1:41 pm
Thanks!  I put the stuff that was originally in quotes into the rest of the body of the poem. Thanks for the advice, I really appreciate it!
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