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When I'm gone,
do not sorrow.
For I am still here-
waiting, watching,
proctecting.
Don't worry.
There's no need to say goodbye.



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Nikiblue said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 8:29 pm:
This is good but a little short. What you put in the quotes would have been a good addition to the poem. Keep up the good work (:
 
astheworldturns replied...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 7:14 am :
Thanks! I appreciate it.
 
BobbysGirl replied...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 8:39 pm :
Yeah, Like again Niki is right...i think it would be better if it was longer an if you added what you put in the quotes! :} but i still like it too :}
 
HeronHero replied...
May 12, 2010 at 1:43 am :
I agree you need to dive deeper!:)
 
Muffy replied...
May 12, 2010 at 4:36 pm :
Awesome, thanks for the comments, y'all! I really appreciate them. :)
 
Schnoodlebear replied...
May 15, 2010 at 11:16 am :
I agree with Nikki too. It is already a great poem. But if you added some of the qoute it would make it an amazing poem!
 
Muffy replied...
May 15, 2010 at 1:41 pm :
Thanks!  I put the stuff that was originally in quotes into the rest of the body of the poem. Thanks for the advice, I really appreciate it!
 
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