Afflicted

January 28, 2010
By AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Life it too short to let you matter.


I want to feel you;
Rub my mind against yours,
And steal your secrets,
While I pretend to let mine leak out.
It’s so dark in here,
But I can feel the hum,
Of someone else hiding too,
Lets feel the sun.
I’m picking you to save,
Soaking up the dangerous thoughts,
Rolling around in darkness,
That creep up on you.
I so want to feel the warmth,
That others allow,
Will it feel like love…
Without the taint of hate?
Reach out to me, please reach,
Because I can get lost,
In the darkness.
Sometimes it’s hard to breath,
Or remember how,
And it’s not even that dark,
Now it’s nothing just nothing.
Do you see gray?
Can your eyes find me?
And the shadows stepping forward,
Crawling in the crevices,
And taking over weakness.
Lets share our minds,
And see if they are indeed the same.
Are we stronger together?



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on Aug. 17 2011 at 3:19 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

So, seeing as some of my writing is up, do you mind reading anything?

on Jun. 18 2011 at 10:34 pm
CaptainFabulous GOLD, Gray Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes I believe in as many as six impossible things before breakfast" - Lewis Carroll

this is an incredible poem

truly loved it

you have talent for sure

comment on mine sometime??


on Jun. 11 2011 at 7:19 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

Between this, oppulence, and storm, i'm really starting to feel like a stalker. I love you're writing!! Call me a fan! :3

on Jun. 7 2011 at 1:46 pm
R5andParamore BRONZE, Manalapan, New Jersey
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I also agree.

on Mar. 16 2011 at 8:47 am
sunshine04 BRONZE, Vindhyanagar, Other
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i agree tooo

on Mar. 16 2011 at 8:46 am
sunshine04 BRONZE, Vindhyanagar, Other
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true the opulence and this both rocked

on Nov. 6 2010 at 11:05 am
Jakethesnake SILVER, Hernando, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
"Read, Read... Read everything, then write."-William Faulkner

After I read Opulence, I had to read the rest. I almost feel like a stalker, but consider me a regular reader!

on Nov. 3 2010 at 9:59 pm
SideraCaeli GOLD, Marysville, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
“Be yourself. Above all, let who you are, what you are, what you believe, shine through every sentence you write, every piece you finish.” -John Jakes.

This was great! My favorite part was "I want to feel you; Rub my mind against yours" It was all great, but that is my favorite line :) Good job!

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on Jun. 25 2010 at 5:47 pm
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

beautiful. i lovbe ur writing, you have alot of talent. 5/5. btw-can you check out some of my stuff?

on Jun. 3 2010 at 8:51 pm
Jonathan_Peraza SILVER, Lilburn, Georgia
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Dude, I love all your writing! :) I Think I'm In Love <3 :)) jk but I am definetely a fan of yours.. :)

on Jun. 3 2010 at 7:12 pm
livelovelaugh353 SILVER, San Carlos, California
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I agree with MidnightBlue! Those were my favorite lines. Great job!

on Apr. 19 2010 at 6:32 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

this is incrediblee. i luvv it. def one of my favez! amazingg work plz keep it upp!!

on Apr. 2 2010 at 10:11 am
MidnightBlue SILVER, Fairfax, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Seize the day, trusting as little as possible in the future.

Great poem! I especially love the lines "Rub my mind against yours,
And steal your secrets,
While I pretend to let mine leak out." They really struck a chord for me.

 


on Mar. 31 2010 at 2:05 pm
elfiewrites BRONZE, Hillsdale, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"The seat of knowledge is in the head, of wisdom, in the heart."~William Hazlitt
"Be yourself, everyone else is taken."

Wow! This is very well-written!! If you get the chance, may you please comment on my work, too? I could use some comments! Thanks so much

on Mar. 6 2010 at 3:50 pm
xLoVeLyCuTiEe428x PLATINUM, Nanuet, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"To me, Fearless is not the absense of fear. It's not being completely unafraid. To me, Fearless is having fears. Fearless is having doubts. Lots of them. To me, Fearless is living in spite of those things that scare you to death."
— Taylor Swift

breath-taking. well-written. amazing

on Feb. 12 2010 at 11:44 am
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

woww. this is so powerful! i love it :P incredible descriptions


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