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I want to feel you;
Rub my mind against yours,
And steal your secrets,
While I pretend to let mine leak out.
It’s so dark in here,
But I can feel the hum,
Of someone else hiding too,
Lets feel the sun.
I’m picking you to save,
Soaking up the dangerous thoughts,
Rolling around in darkness,
That creep up on you.
I so want to feel the warmth,
That others allow,
Will it feel like love…
Without the taint of hate?
Reach out to me, please reach,
Because I can get lost,
In the darkness.
Sometimes it’s hard to breath,
Or remember how,
And it’s not even that dark,
Now it’s nothing just nothing.
Do you see gray?
Can your eyes find me?
And the shadows stepping forward,
Crawling in the crevices,
And taking over weakness.
Lets share our minds,
And see if they are indeed the same.
Are we stronger together?




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CaptainFabulousThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 10:34 pm:

this is an incredible poem

truly loved it

you have talent for sure

comment on mine sometime??

 
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Lola_Black said...
Jun. 11, 2011 at 7:19 pm:
Between this, oppulence, and storm, i'm really starting to feel like a stalker. I love you're writing!! Call me a fan! :3
 
Lola_Black replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:19 pm :
So, seeing as some of my writing is up, do you mind reading anything?
 
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Jakethesnake said...
Nov. 6, 2010 at 11:05 am:
After I read Opulence, I had to read the rest. I almost feel like a stalker, but consider me a regular reader!
 
sunshine04 replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 8:46 am :
true the opulence and this both rocked
 
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SideraCaeli said...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 9:59 pm:
This was great! My favorite part was "I want to feel you; Rub my mind against yours" It was all great, but that is my favorite line :) Good job!
 
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_Elsy_ said...
Jun. 25, 2010 at 5:47 pm:
beautiful. i lovbe ur writing, you have alot of talent. 5/5. btw-can you check out some of my stuff?
 
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AngelicRocker This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 8:51 pm:
Dude, I love all your writing! :) I Think I'm In Love <3 :)) jk but I am definetely a fan of yours.. :)
 
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xBaByGiRrL22xThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 19, 2010 at 6:32 pm:
this is incrediblee. i luvv it. def one of my favez! amazingg work plz keep it upp!!
 
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MidnightBlue This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 2, 2010 at 10:11 am:

Great poem! I especially love the lines "Rub my mind against yours,
And steal your secrets,
While I pretend to let mine leak out." They really struck a chord for me.

 

 
livelovelaugh35 replied...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 7:12 pm :
I agree with MidnightBlue! Those were my favorite lines. Great job!
 
sunshine04 replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 8:47 am :
i agree tooo
 
DisicpleofChristandJesusEnthusiast replied...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 1:46 pm :
I also agree.
 
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elfiewrites said...
Mar. 31, 2010 at 2:05 pm:
Wow! This is very well-written!! If you get the chance, may you please comment on my work, too? I could use some comments! Thanks so much
 
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xLoVeLyCuTiEe428x said...
Mar. 6, 2010 at 3:50 pm:
breath-taking. well-written. amazing
 
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sasssgirrrl22 said...
Feb. 12, 2010 at 11:44 am:
woww. this is so powerful! i love it :P incredible descriptions
 
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