When Bees get Lonely MAG

January 16, 2010
By Shelly.B DIAMOND, Lawrenceville, Georgia
Shelly.B DIAMOND, Lawrenceville, Georgia
55 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be happy, the sky is still blue....kinda'


Seven-thousand, nine-hundred-and-seventy octangular suns
and none of them were made for you.
Drunk on golden syrup
and too heavy for your own wings,
you'll drift in and out of the reality some genius named “the sky.”
Flowers tangle among each other to strangle cobwebs.
The earth's getting old and you feel like being younger.
Paint yourself yellow with scars of black
because contrast is interesting and drama is too.
Seven-thousand, nine-hundred-and-seventy octangular suns
and none of them were made for you.


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honeybee

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on Mar. 28 2011 at 7:56 am
Dewwagner SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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I love the use of numbers in a poem, so thats a plus. I love the lines 'beacuse contrast is interesting and drama is too' and 'too heavy for your own wings' good emotion.

on Mar. 27 2011 at 4:06 pm
bluewordy SILVER, Canandaigua, New York
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This made me desperately sad...such a lovely poem. Made me think of summers, and the few memories I have of being little. Poetry that reaches readers' hearts is good poetry.

on Mar. 27 2011 at 9:19 am
spagooter PLATINUM, Indianapolis, Indiana
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this was brilliant.

i have seen a lot of horrid poems on this site. this puts a majority of the over-the-top melodramatic ones to shame: you showed a great sense of control and used it to your advantage. the imagery is beautiful and the flow is right-on. 

do us all a favor and don't stop writing.


on Mar. 26 2011 at 2:32 pm
CaptainFabulous GOLD, Gray Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes I believe in as many as six impossible things before breakfast" - Lewis Carroll

awesome so descriptive about something so simple i really like this

on Mar. 25 2011 at 7:14 pm
Scarlett BRONZE, Gulfport, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
when the going gets tough, bite an orange_ (idk made it up)

very unique, I liked it :)

on Mar. 25 2011 at 10:08 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

this is wonderful and amazing :0) congrats on getting published! this deserves to be

on Mar. 24 2011 at 8:58 pm
Shelly.B DIAMOND, Lawrenceville, Georgia
55 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be happy, the sky is still blue....kinda'

Thank you.

on Mar. 24 2011 at 8:12 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Wow, this was a truly beautiful poem. I loved how you wrote about something so original, but delivered it in such a unique and sad way. Keep on writing, this is amazing work of art! 8)


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