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Peach

January 3, 2010
By ModernMissBennet BRONZE, Spanaway, Washington
ModernMissBennet BRONZE, Spanaway, Washington
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Juice caresses my tongue
a ballet
dancing on my lips
and pallet,
praising Jah for creation.
A marriage
of beauty and taste.
Sweet insides
running down fingers
and my chin.
Sticky meat of fruit.
centered stony pit.
Rite-value velvety,
loose skin,
concealing
under-appreciated paradise.

The author's comments:
My favorite fruit:) Feedback, please.

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on Nov. 4 2010 at 7:06 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Beautiful! You described it perfectly! Except I would substitute "Flesh" for "meat" in line eleven. But then again, I didn't write this poem, did I? :)

I love your style, kinda short and sweet, simple yet you totally get to the heart of the matter.

Thanks for sharing this with us on Teenink :)


on Jun. 16 2010 at 11:24 pm
ModernMissBennet BRONZE, Spanaway, Washington
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I'm wondering- how do u know I'm a Jehovah's witness?

L. Burrell said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 9:53 am
Nice job JW gal :)

on Jan. 29 2010 at 11:37 pm
ModernMissBennet BRONZE, Spanaway, Washington
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