The Jewel MAG

December 17, 2009
By StrawberryTofu PLATINUM, New City, New York
StrawberryTofu PLATINUM, New City, New York
24 articles 11 photos 13 comments

She would have to be a choker necklace.
Bold and daring,
An intricate pattern of crystals and lace.
You would be lost staring into the angled facets

Of her personality. Oh, clichéd duality!
She divides herself unevenly,
She bakes cookies with a smile, but later she
Bites back with a vengeance.

She could be a light pink crystal, within delicate gold chains,
But instead she sets herself
In black painted silver chains of memories,
Creating her own unhappiness,
Self sabotage is in style.

People are drawn to this disintegrating jewel,
Attempt to save her, even I tried, but she resisted my glue.
As a choker, she is fastened tightly around my neck.
Weighing me down, a new victim, slowly.

My new shoes are coated in dust from
Dragging on the ground.
She was clinging for stability.
I could not make up for her mother,

And so she takes it out on the world. She throws a fit,
Pinpoints my insecurities like darts on a map.
I struggle to declare myself an uncharted destination,
And take my name out of her sight.

She paints her eyes
And applies a smile,
Heel, toe, she struts forward
Off to find someone new.

She wraps herself around new people quickly,
And shows no recognition of who I am.
I finally breathe and try to sort out my feelings
About life alone, now, and life before my neck was bare.



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SadisticKiwi said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 2:49 am
Very deep poem. Your word choice and style is very powerful and strong. The metaphors you use to describe this girl are amazing. I get the sense that the narrator feels like this girl is an infection, a disease, or something of the sort. I can't help but wonder who this girl is in real life or if she's a character you've made up. Well whoever she is, she gave you great inspiration to write a fabulous poem. Congrats on it getting published in a magazine! 

on Jun. 4 2010 at 6:52 am
StrawberryTofu PLATINUM, New City, New York
24 articles 11 photos 13 comments
haha no problem. Same, but what can you do? People won't change unless they want to...

on Jun. 3 2010 at 5:47 pm
Thethingiseek BRONZE, N Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"May we continue not to judge man by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."- by
"The day we stopped fighting for eachother is the day we lost our humanity"-2012 movie
"No man is equivalent to the person next to him."me

O. srry. I feel for ur friend

on Jun. 3 2010 at 4:12 pm
StrawberryTofu PLATINUM, New City, New York
24 articles 11 photos 13 comments

Thanks, I'm happy this is getting good feedback. =]

Um, I just need to make one correction, I'm a girl. lol, I wrote this about an old friend that I had. We went from being like sisters to strangers and it was a hard time for me. 


on Jun. 3 2010 at 4:06 pm
StrawberryTofu PLATINUM, New City, New York
24 articles 11 photos 13 comments
haha thanks, I'm glad you like it. 

on Jun. 2 2010 at 1:02 pm
Thethingiseek BRONZE, N Las Vegas, Nevada
2 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"May we continue not to judge man by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."- by
"The day we stopped fighting for eachother is the day we lost our humanity"-2012 movie
"No man is equivalent to the person next to him."me

This is so beautifully put together. How he feels like he's choked by only her feelings and anger and u can only just sit there untill she lets u go..all alone and doesnt seem to care.  Absoulutley beautiful... please check out my writting and I hope u enjoy!

on Jun. 2 2010 at 7:01 am
AndTheVinesSpin GOLD, Romulus, Michigan
11 articles 1 photo 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is the Movement" -TWLOHA
"Love is our weapon." -Christofer Drew
"I'ma get me a High School Diploma, even if I gotta steal one!" -ThisKidInMyMathClassLol

This is so unusual... But I really love it. It kind of puts into words something we all see, but haven't discussed. Or at least, I haven't. Five stars kid.


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