Seperated

The names
The names I've been called
The problems
My problems you can not solve
The pain
My pain you caused me
The hurt
My hurt that wont let me be
The tears
My tears that fall like rain
The marks
My marks from all the pain
The life
My life that seems to be going nowhere
The heart
My heart without a care
The feelings
My feelings that hurt so bad
The mom
My mom I thought I once had





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PurpleMidnight said...
Oct. 25, 2009 at 9:32 pm
Wow! This is an AMAZING poem! It sounds like it could be a song. You are an amazing writer!
 
blingblang4eva said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 6:14 pm
love this poem. love the pattern and organization. very creative and well written
 
Izzy_Nicole said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 5:00 pm
This is beautiful.
 
jesusfreak.91210 said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 4:28 pm
i enjoyed reading this
 
stotlers said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 11:45 am
This piece made me think a little. I enjoyed reading it and by the time I was done I aquirred a hunch of what it was about. Where you write " My marks from all the pain" and "The mom, my mom I thought I once had" really clicked together for me. I thought It sounded like there was a case of child abuse and the young girl was hurting inside. Great work! Keep up the good work!
 
Jazzzy517 said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 10:40 am
wo0ow... thats so deep..... i kno alot of people that feel that way..........
keep up the good work
 
The.Kinda.Girl.You.Wanna.Know said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 9:52 am
I like this poem. Nice structure and it makes you feel. Awsome job keep it up!
 
veloCity said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 9:28 am
I've enjoyed reading this, keep up the good work
 
Jordon. said...
Oct. 22, 2009 at 1:53 am
i love this! well done, keep it up (:
 
allmostfamous22 said...
Oct. 21, 2009 at 11:10 pm
nice poem i love it.
 
Nanna said...
Oct. 21, 2009 at 11:04 pm
I love your structure. This is a very nice piece.
 
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