Seperated

October 18, 2009
By wafflesmego1 PLATINUM, Gladstone, Missouri
wafflesmego1 PLATINUM, Gladstone, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Were gonna get through this together kiddo" - My grandpa


The names
The names I've been called
The problems
My problems you can not solve
The pain
My pain you caused me
The hurt
My hurt that wont let me be
The tears
My tears that fall like rain
The marks
My marks from all the pain
The life
My life that seems to be going nowhere
The heart
My heart without a care
The feelings
My feelings that hurt so bad
The mom
My mom I thought I once had



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on Oct. 25 2009 at 9:32 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow! This is an AMAZING poem! It sounds like it could be a song. You are an amazing writer!

on Oct. 22 2009 at 6:14 pm
blingblang4eva ELITE, Fayetteville, Georgia
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love this poem. love the pattern and organization. very creative and well written

on Oct. 22 2009 at 5:00 pm
Izzy_Nicole GOLD, Pineville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I have made a ceaseless effort not to ridicule, not to bewail, not to scorn human actions, but to understand them." --Benedict Spinoza

This is beautiful.

on Oct. 22 2009 at 4:28 pm
i enjoyed reading this

stotlers said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 11:45 am
This piece made me think a little. I enjoyed reading it and by the time I was done I aquirred a hunch of what it was about. Where you write " My marks from all the pain" and "The mom, my mom I thought I once had" really clicked together for me. I thought It sounded like there was a case of child abuse and the young girl was hurting inside. Great work! Keep up the good work!

Jazzzy517 GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 10:40 am
Jazzzy517 GOLD, Meriden, Connecticut
17 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
Learn from yesterday, live for today, hope for tomorrow.

wo0ow... thats so deep..... i kno alot of people that feel that way..........

keep up the good work

on Oct. 22 2009 at 9:52 am
Just-Maybe GOLD, South Salem, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out. Dance in the rain. Cherish the moment. Ignore the pain. Live, love, laugh. Forgive & Forget. Life's too short to live with regrets.

I like this poem. Nice structure and it makes you feel. Awsome job keep it up!

on Oct. 22 2009 at 9:28 am
veloCity BRONZE, Willingboro, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
I'm saying though, I mean like...

I've enjoyed reading this, keep up the good work

on Oct. 22 2009 at 1:53 am
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
19 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

i love this! well done, keep it up (:

on Oct. 21 2009 at 11:10 pm
StandardToaster PLATINUM, Pasadena, California
20 articles 0 photos 210 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't suffer from insanity; I enjoy ever minute of it."

nice poem i love it.

on Oct. 21 2009 at 11:04 pm
Writedancelove&live GOLD, Redding, California
12 articles 2 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much."
"Karen: If you're from Africa why are you white? Gretchen: Omg Karen, you can't just ask people why they're white."

I love your structure. This is a very nice piece.


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