My Own World

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I am in my own world, but not alone,
I wonder how I got here or when I will leave,
I hear what I want to hear,
I see what I want to see,
I want to be here forever,
I am in my own world, but not alone

I pretend that everything here is real,
I feel every sadness, love, and heartbreak,
I touch the lives of the people,
I worry that I will forget,
I cry with them, I laugh with them,
I am in my own world, but not alone





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dancer21 said...
Oct. 26, 2009 at 8:57 pm
AMAZING!!!!!!
 
dontbesociallyakward said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 10:02 pm
awesomeeeee!!! this writer deserves to be the next big thing!!! and she will be.
 
writer1029384756 replied...
Oct. 25, 2009 at 1:02 pm
THANKS SO MUCH!! THATS SO SWEET!
 
Sara said...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 10:04 am
Its... okay... keep it up, I guess. The last paragraph you may want to work on:
"I pretend that everything here is real"
Seems to contradict:
Its confusing, because the poem claims things like 'I cry with them, I laugh with them' when its only fake, because it just stated that the person in the poem is pretending.
The writer doesn't continue to acknowledge the fact that the person in the poem is pretending, so its very unclear.
 
writer1029384756 replied...
Oct. 24, 2009 at 12:29 pm
Thank you for your constructive critisim, I really really apperciate it.
 
rach said...
Oct. 23, 2009 at 6:54 pm
shes in middle school, isnt she good, great job btw!
 
kjs2211 said...
Oct. 23, 2009 at 5:50 pm
Who what a great perspective...this writer must be exceptional. How old is he/she?
 
writer1029384756 replied...
Oct. 23, 2009 at 9:23 pm
Thank you so much for your great compliments on my work!! You guys rock!!!
 
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