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If she could go back
She would change her mind
If she could go back
She wouldn't have gotten intertwined
Into indescribable madness
I see that she would have much rather flied

If he could go back
He wouldn't have burned the tree
If he could go back
He would've set the bird free
Into the skies to glide above the seas
I see that he would have much rather let her fly

And at times I think that all would have been better for them,
Even if it met not having me.




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IndiloveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 25, 2012 at 7:44 am:
this is verrrryyy goood work. ur an amazing writer!!!
 
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RitaChristine This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 3:37 pm:
Wow! This is a very heavy piece. Good for you for expressing it in words. I like how it's split into three stanzas. One for her, one for him, one for you. That's genius.
My critique would be to check grammar before posting. (Flied - I think you meant either fled or flown. And met - I think you meant 'meant'.)
Excellent work, keep it up!
 
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abigail_e said...
Dec. 6, 2010 at 9:42 pm:
beautiful and sad. I love it. I can understand the feeling.
 
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ShernayB. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 2:42 pm:
I totally get this.
Its really depressing, between the girl and the guy.
Your piece is wonderful.
 
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