Daisies

She stares,
Unblinking,
Into the distance.
"Time of death?"
No response.
He turns,
Demanding an answer.
"12:05"
It's just so sad,
So tragic.
She was
So young.
So precious.
So alive
With pink cheeks,
Cute dimples
So sweet
So innocent.
But now she stares,
Unblinking,
Into the distance.
Her eyes are closed for her
And she looks so pretty.
She could almost be sleeping
With pink cheeks,
Cute dimples.
With daisies in her hair
And a knife at her side.





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Warm_My_Heart said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 3:54 am
So amazing. I love the end. Beautiful.
 
Reader:) said...
Dec. 3, 2009 at 10:37 pm
selling error: "pureley" --> "purely"
 
Reader:) replied...
Dec. 3, 2009 at 10:38 pm
selling --> spelling
 
Reader:) said...
Dec. 3, 2009 at 10:36 pm
pureley amazing
 
~uprising~ said...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 5:51 pm
dude, this rocks!! I love it
 
Anjo! said...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 3:49 pm
Woah, strong last sentence. love it. =]
 
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 3:58 pm
thanks! i debated for a really long time about whether it should be that or "and a gun in her hand." do you think i made the right call or is the gun thing more powerful?
 
Anjo! replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:02 pm
no, you totally made the right call on that one. the knife line is so much better, trust me
 
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:07 pm
awesome, thanks. lol i love having you to run ideas by!
 
Anjo! replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:18 pm
Haha, any time =] i had a friend encouraging me and helping me out when i started getting into poetry, he helped me so much. =] So i know how it feels to get help from someone, its pretty awesome. =]
 
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:20 pm
yeah it is, you rock, dude! fantasmic! <3
 
Anjo! replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:21 pm
haha, thank you lol =] Fantasmic, now that a new word to my vocabulary
 
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:45 pm
haha yeah, talking to me, you'll probably learn a lot of new words lol
 
Anjo! replied...
Sept. 19, 2009 at 4:46 pm
lol, awesome =]
 
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