Daisies

September 3, 2009

She stares,
Unblinking,
Into the distance.
"Time of death?"
No response.
He turns,
Demanding an answer.
"12:05"
It's just so sad,
So tragic.
She was
So young.
So precious.
So alive
With pink cheeks,
Cute dimples
So sweet
So innocent.
But now she stares,
Unblinking,
Into the distance.
Her eyes are closed for her
And she looks so pretty.
She could almost be sleeping
With pink cheeks,
Cute dimples.
With daisies in her hair
And a knife at her side.

The author's comments:
I was lying awake in bed just thinking and the song from Sweeney Todd came into my head. The one where Mrs. Lovett is singing about how pretty daisies might brighten up the room. That's what inspired this piece. I just thought of it and started writing. I know it's not my best work, but that's ok. I have to fail sometimes in order to succeed.

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on Jun. 26 2011 at 3:54 am
Warm_My_Heart GOLD, My City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Too often we underestimate the power of a touch, a smile, a kind word, a listening ear, an honest compliment, or the smallest act of caring, all of which have the potential to turn a life around.”
Leo F. Buscaglia

So amazing. I love the end. Beautiful.

on Dec. 3 2009 at 10:38 pm
teenwrite123 BRONZE, New York, New York
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selling --> spelling

on Dec. 3 2009 at 10:37 pm
teenwrite123 BRONZE, New York, New York
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selling error: "pureley" --> "purely"

on Dec. 3 2009 at 10:36 pm
teenwrite123 BRONZE, New York, New York
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pureley amazing

~uprising~ said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 5:51 pm
dude, this rocks!! I love it

Anjo! SILVER said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:46 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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lol, awesome =]

on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:45 pm
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. PLATINUM, Longmont, Colorado
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haha yeah, talking to me, you'll probably learn a lot of new words lol

Anjo! SILVER said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:21 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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haha, thank you lol =] Fantasmic, now that a new word to my vocabulary

on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:20 pm
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. PLATINUM, Longmont, Colorado
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yeah it is, you rock, dude! fantasmic! <3

Anjo! SILVER said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:18 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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Haha, any time =] i had a friend encouraging me and helping me out when i started getting into poetry, he helped me so much. =] So i know how it feels to get help from someone, its pretty awesome. =]

on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:07 pm
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. PLATINUM, Longmont, Colorado
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awesome, thanks. lol i love having you to run ideas by!

Anjo! SILVER said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:02 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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no, you totally made the right call on that one. the knife line is so much better, trust me

on Sep. 19 2009 at 3:58 pm
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. PLATINUM, Longmont, Colorado
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thanks! i debated for a really long time about whether it should be that or "and a gun in her hand." do you think i made the right call or is the gun thing more powerful?

Anjo! SILVER said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 3:49 pm
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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Woah, strong last sentence. love it. =]


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