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eyes meet, impulse to stare

the intent gaze intensifies
the chaotic world continues
but all of its frivolities
disappear in the fog

for a five-second span
time and place forgotten
a name, a purpose, a thought
lost in the stupor

lids stay strained
will not dare to blink
every flake of worry
vanishes in the misty haze

heads turn, moment gone.

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Dreamer_of_Dreams said...
May 21, 2010 at 12:52 pm:
How many copies of the 2nd Grade critic's book have you all checked out? This poem gives me the impulse to look away.  Please don't look at my works because they are difinitively better than yours.
 
raindance72 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 10:43 am :

Dreamer_of_Dreams, there is a fine line between constructive criticism and being flat out rude, and you have definitely crossed it. You don't have to like it, but you don't have to express your malicious hate for it in such a snotty way either.

And I don't know why you had to write that you had "standards" on your account. You should be flattered when people ask you to review their work, it means they admire your writing. Maybe I would too if you weren't passing out put downs like t... (more »)

 
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soccerchickunc said...
Apr. 29, 2010 at 6:50 pm:
this is really awesome i love it (: amazing meaning & flow. could you check out my poem an escape? i need feedback to improve. thanks (:
 
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Powd3er said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 2:52 pm:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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scarletP said...
Nov. 24, 2009 at 11:04 pm:
wish i could capture so much emotion in such a short amount of words...that is true talent
 
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nancyy. said...
Nov. 4, 2009 at 1:34 pm:
i reeally like that, nice job(:
 
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This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 4, 2009 at 11:41 am:
Very good. You managed to capture a lot in a very short poem. Good job.
 
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Yael R. said...
Sept. 3, 2009 at 10:28 pm:
the first and last line really close in "the moment" i luv it!
 
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dA gAnGsTeR said...
Sept. 2, 2009 at 12:38 am:
VERY BEAUTIFUL!!!!!=)
i <3ed it and i wish i could meet you!
I <3 writing poems But you are lik so much better than me! LOL!!!
 
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writer24/7/365 said...
Sept. 1, 2009 at 12:48 am:
ur so good. u said so little, and yet so mucch
 
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sarah.c This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 22, 2009 at 9:06 am:
great poem.love it
 
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girlygreek said...
Aug. 20, 2009 at 2:02 pm:
amazing.
 
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Abigail G. said...
Aug. 19, 2009 at 6:17 am:
Pretty good. Very accurate discription. I agree with Eilina S., it needs a bit more rythem.
 
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MorningStar15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 19, 2009 at 1:28 am:
aww i loved it
 
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Angelalala said...
Aug. 18, 2009 at 1:43 am:
wow i really loved this poem you captured the moment so perfectly wonderful wonderful poem
 
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lightbearer said...
Aug. 12, 2009 at 2:21 pm:
i really like the idea. great inspiration
 
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Samantha G. said...
Aug. 11, 2009 at 1:55 am:
niceness
 
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Eilina S. said...
Aug. 8, 2009 at 3:21 pm:
I think more format and rhythym would have made this a winner, but otherwise it's ok. Nice work.
 
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KDtheGhostwriter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 3, 2009 at 7:14 pm:
A great writer can say what they want to say in the fewest of words. Congratulations on accomplishing this and getting published. Well deserved.
 
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despurlock This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 1, 2009 at 5:22 pm:
Beautiful! Simple and yet cryptic and so so so meaningful. Keep it up!
 
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hannah=(= said...
Aug. 1, 2009 at 4:50 pm:
Wow, it's like I felt it.
 
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