Deep Sleep Slumber MAG

June 29, 2009
By Tina Saienni BRONZE, Monmouth Junction, New Jersey
Tina Saienni BRONZE, Monmouth Junction, New Jersey
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I like to watch you sleeping
your chest, it caves, your lungs inflate.
the faintness of your voice, it soothes
dreams captured in tangled locks
I remember when they were orange.

the breath you breathe it’s louder now
I still don’t understand
what are you trying to tell me?
your paws tucked neatly under that chest
your nape, it peeks from under those locks.

back turned toward the sun
I don’t agree one moment!
the sun should illuminate your face
within a sweet face rests tired muscles
today, it’s a collarbone foundation.

toes tangled in sleep, ankles wrenched with exhaust
your clothes don’t fit you right
a sleepy voice now tugs at my sleeve
I can barely hear the hum

escaped dreams, come and tackle me
tickle, tackle, ’til I fall
into a deep sleep slumber too

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on Feb. 2 2010 at 12:26 pm
KiNABABE SILVER, Lakewood, New Jersey
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Keep writing good work

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on Dec. 20 2009 at 8:20 pm
amac09 BRONZE, Monmouth Junction, New Jersey
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this is amazing = )

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on Sep. 3 2009 at 7:37 am
AmnyR BRONZE, Clifton, Texas
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To the world, you may be just one person, but to one person, you may be the whole world. ~unknown

this is beautiful. great work

on Aug. 23 2009 at 10:49 pm
AngelForeverBleedingLove DIAMOND, Frederic, Wisconsin
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You say you don't remember,
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This is so beautiful! I agree with Ramna! Encore!!!

tina said...
on Aug. 20 2009 at 3:54 pm
you, you and you.. you're all way too sweet! thank you for reading and your feedback! :]

on Aug. 14 2009 at 1:28 am
ramnapotter PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
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“Write to be understood, speak to be heard, read to grow...”

You made my day. Encore. Though nothing compared your published and appraised piece, please consider reading my work.

on Aug. 13 2009 at 6:09 am
Jacquelyn Salzbank SILVER, Port Washington, New York
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absolutely adorable!

on Aug. 9 2009 at 12:07 am
Eilina Sealtman SILVER, London, Other
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That is pure art. You have paintd a beautiful picture. It's the kind of thing that makes us girls go AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

on Jul. 17 2009 at 4:23 pm
caniblexcarmen BRONZE, Auckland, Other
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i love it its such a cute/briliant peice =)

on Jul. 16 2009 at 11:32 pm
yourworstnightmare BRONZE, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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Beautiful. I love it!

on Jul. 8 2009 at 8:53 am
Only,I PLATINUM, Taylorville, Illinois
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i like this its sweet and makes me smile:)

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