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She capers across the living room carpet,
hands tracing an intricate pattern in the air
as her feet crisscross on the floor.
I try to ignore her best I can,
my nose shoved stubbornly
in the centerfold of a magazine,
but I see her out of the corner of my eye,
twirling, dancing, flying.
My little sister,
almost an exact replica of me,
except that from every orifice of her body
seeps an incandescent glow.
She slips from my fingertips,
leaping lazy figure-eights
around and ’round and ’round.
She prances across the Milky Way
in long grand jetés,
toes pointed, legs straight,
arms out and up and open
in a wide, graceful U.
She swings on Saturn’s rings
as if crossing rusty monkey bars,
then soars from star to star
until leaping up in an arc
and descending down
toward Neptune,
in a cannonball to the sea.
She floats on her back
catching her breath slowly
and then rises to begin again.
She dances, dances, dances
back to me from across the galaxy
until she is inches from my hands.
I reach out to her and beg

“Take me with you.
Take me to the edge of the sky
where up is down
and falling is flying,
where time is timeless
and hide-and-seek
never ends.”

She smiles in pity and says nothing,
immersed in her dance,
twirling in and out of sight,
following a labyrinthine path only she can see,
dodging the couches and the coffee table.
I watch her hair move like a shadow,
dark as a vacant night
until the lamplight latches on
and illuminates the strands like shooting stars;
all the while, I sit back
wondering when the moment passed
that I lost my courage to dance.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Katherine H. said...
Sept. 4, 2009 at 6:48 pm
W-O-W
Thats all i can really say.
You've left me SPEECHLESS!!!!!!!
LOOOOOVED IT!!!!
 
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Nov. 30, 2014 at 8:07 am
Beautiful, I can relate so much. I'm adding it to my favourites, thank you for this poem. :)
 
Jennax3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 19, 2009 at 3:47 pm
I'm just awed at how you captured EXACTLY my sister and I. Naturally, she's the dancer, and I'm the one who cannot dance. And this is beautifully poetic... your descriptions are outstanding.
Congrats on the publication!
 
Mackenzie M. said...
Jul. 31, 2009 at 3:57 am
You have a talent my friend! that was shocking! (:
 
Jessica E. said...
Jul. 27, 2009 at 7:58 am
this is amazing.
 
Duckie430 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2009 at 5:56 pm
wow, absolutely amazing.
 
Like*Whoa!!! This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 18, 2009 at 6:23 pm
that was beautiful! it reminds me of the song "drops of jupiter" if you've never heard it i would check it out:) GREAT job <3
 
Melinda L. said...
Jul. 17, 2009 at 4:35 pm
whoa...beautiful! :) I loved the end.
 
soac09 said...
Jun. 28, 2009 at 1:29 am
totally amazing!! perfect.
 
dncr17 said...
Jun. 26, 2009 at 2:45 am
wow! this piece is truly amazing, and I can connect to it, and I just completely loved it! congrats on writing a truly amazing poem.
 
BebopCowboy said...
Jun. 24, 2009 at 9:52 pm
amazing. 5 stars!
 
Stormwriter said...
Jun. 23, 2009 at 2:23 am
This is amazing. You captured all the joys of childhood in words, something nearly impossible to do. This peice of work makes you want to go back in time. Keep writing, you're really good.
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 7:07 pm
This is very good. It shows that you have envy in your little sister? I like that. Although envy is one of the seven deadly sins, this is still beautiful. Good job!
 
despurlock This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 6:40 pm
Wow! That was phenomenal! I am speechless now, however that was fantastic! I loved the way your poetry sucks the reader in, and I could see your little sister dancing all the while. This is really a great piece, I can't wait to read more from you! Please check out some of my poems and let me know what you think! Thanks!
 
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