Girl In My Sleep MAG

By Adam G., Chicago, IL

     (There I’m in myself and cannot speak but to charm you
And hear the friction of your every move.) You
Flit from my subterranean garden to the fleshy salty
real of waking and back so seamlessly. While above you
one moment I suddenly find myself smaller
and (so small) see so smallest; say, I love you.




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i love this so much!

on Sep. 9 2014 at 7:43 pm
Savannainthesky GOLD, West Suffield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"It may have been in pieces.. but I gave you the best of me"-Jim Morrison(the doors)

Amazing imagery! Very well written, congrats!

on Oct. 17 2009 at 5:38 pm
Very good! :) Did you base your poem on real experiences?

on Oct. 11 2009 at 9:44 pm
nevercliche159 BRONZE, Clark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"A man who has nothing to die for, is not fit to live."
--- Martin Luther King Jr.

I love your word choices. The set up of the poem is interesting and I really like how you started with the parenthesis. I would just change the punctuation of ";say, I love you."

Alice28 GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2009 at 4:42 pm
Alice28 GOLD, Somewhere Over The Rainbow, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Its hard to defeat someone...who never gives up.

i like this poem..i had to read it over and over again to finally get it but its really good.

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on Sep. 6 2009 at 1:46 pm
Layton GOLD, Abilene, Texas
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I really like this alot dude. It great, I totally get the emotion and what you're trying to say. Keep it up.


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