Oak Sapling MAG

May 20, 2009
By Andrew Dobies GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
Andrew Dobies GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 2 comments

That I were ill or blind
so that the calming touch
of your cool and gentle hand
would be a balm to my forehead
and give me closure.
That blood would stream
from my wounded arm
so you would hold me gingerly
and linger as my vision left,
an angel in the desert of perpetual night.
That I were dying under the stars,
your arm draped gracefully across my chest
and your nose breathing softly into my neck
as you kiss my cheek good-bye
and let the moonlight steal my soul.

But instead I am alone and healthy,
and come to see your smile shine
for a man who is not me,
with a woman I do not love.
And still none of us,
save myself,
is as broken
and abortive as the sapling in your yard,
which I drove over as I was pulling in.



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on Jul. 1 2011 at 12:30 pm
TolkienLewisWhitman BRONZE, Millersburg, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"All of my posessions for a moment of time." ~ Queen Elizabeth I

I have read some of your writing, and you have mastered the art of using figurative language! I do feel that this poem in particular could have given an picture that was a little clearer, but other than that this is great!

on Mar. 23 2011 at 1:19 pm
HisPurePrincess ELITE, Flemington, New Jersey
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It's very...intruiging.  I don't quite know if I like the picture of it, or what it says to me, but I do like the flow and it's well written.

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on Nov. 26 2010 at 1:18 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

This sounds like something Stephanie Meyer would write.

WhiteShadows said...
on Oct. 10 2010 at 1:56 pm
WhiteShadows, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
You've gotta work like you don't need the money/love like you'll never be hurt/
Sing like no one is listening/ and live like it's heaven on Earth.-Anonymous

MelaineLousie I agree. So beautiful. You have talent, my friend.

on Aug. 1 2010 at 11:07 am
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
37 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

i adore this, very deep but almost innocent. keep writing, Mel

on Jun. 22 2010 at 8:35 am
Eternally17 SILVER, Dubai, Other
5 articles 7 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There exists no heaven and no hell, nothing to look forward to after we have gone to ashes; live every moment NOW, and make things happen the way you want to in this lifetime; not the next."

I love the deep emotions you have conveyed, and the little twist in the ending :)

You write beautifully, well done! :)


on Apr. 17 2010 at 1:02 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

incredible work. so deep with emotion from beginning 2 end. amazing job!

on Jan. 19 2010 at 11:08 pm
aspiring.author.09 PLATINUM, Beaumont, Other
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Incredible, consistent mood until the very last sentence - what a contrast! A bit of humour but deep emotion. Great job!

on Dec. 10 2009 at 9:43 pm
sarahmarie SILVER, Escondido, California
5 articles 16 photos 28 comments
Beautiful.

on Dec. 6 2009 at 8:12 pm
whisperingofdawn GOLD, Colorado City, Arizona
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wow, this made me cry. i love your writing!

on Dec. 4 2009 at 11:00 am
Reaa.Mae.Kuzyk GOLD, Arborg, Manitoba, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Why live trying to just DIE, when people are DYING just for the chance to LIVE."
-Anomynous

"Time has a wonderful way of showing us what really matters."
- Margaret Peters

Oh wow. Powerful.

Keep it up darlin'. : )

on Sep. 28 2009 at 9:55 am
SickImage SILVER, Klamath Falls, Oregon
9 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The room was very quiet. I walked over to the TV set and turned it onto a dead channel-white noise at maximum decibels, a fine sound for sleeping, a powerful continuous hiss to drown out everything strange."

Aw i like it! :]


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