a dream MAG

May 13, 2009
By RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
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awake
he cries
(but even his cries
so sweet as a
song)

dreams
which frighten
he stirs;
come, child,
fear now no more

trembles,
face flushed
clutching and
crawling his way
through the
shadows

afraid, said he,
but over this fear
the stars twinkle
watchful eyes.

click
the switch of a light
away now
the deep and horrible
dark.

a song
(though much more
than music)
fluttering lashes
into the quiet

hush.
soothing
breathe deeply,
my sweet,
I see the moon and the
counting sheep.

forever,
my dear,
to a land faraway.

rest
the night
peaceful sleep.


The author's comments:
I was inspired to write this poem after a night of babysitting, when the little boy I look after had a nightmare. You can be inspired to write a poem about anything at all; don't rule out ordinary occurrences as good subject matter for poetry.

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on Jan. 15 2011 at 2:00 am
lyrical_assassin SILVER, Dubai, Other
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Basically echoing the first comment. I loved the flow, the simplicity of the language and the way the writing is almost ... conversational. Really nice. :)

on Aug. 13 2010 at 8:40 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

you got that right! it has the ambiance of a prayer even... the onomatopoeia blends in beautifully,yet has its own spark... great job!

on Aug. 13 2010 at 10:29 am
J-blotting-ink SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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I love the way the words flow, it sounds as if they should be whispered. Which is absolutely perfect for your subject matter. This is extremely well done.

Also, I love when people abandon capitalization in poetry. ee cummings is my hero.


on May. 4 2010 at 3:32 pm
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
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Thanks so much! I'll be sure to check our your work. :D

on May. 4 2010 at 2:36 pm
MissFaber SILVER, Wayne, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing Less.

that was amazing... its so true how very normal situations can be inspiration for beautiful writing.

it would be great if you could comment and rate my articles! thanks :)


meggyt BRONZE said...
on Apr. 24 2010 at 10:27 pm
meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
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Sometimes I think I forget how much words fill me up. I write constantly in my head but must admit I forget to find paper and a pen at times. But writing is beautiful; that moment where you finish a poem or whatever, and you look back on your very own creation and you breathe out with satisfaction is the best feeling in the world. I hope to see more stuff soon. I'll be checking daily. Haha..

on Apr. 24 2010 at 9:27 pm
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
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Thanks so much Megan! I should... haven't posted anything in a while... :P

meggyt BRONZE said...
on Apr. 24 2010 at 6:50 pm
meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
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Beautifully written. I love the structure of it it truly added to the emotions of the reader. Good job :) you should post more.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 4:53 pm
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
PERSONAL FAVORITE QUOTE::::

"When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!"
-Andy Milanokis?(sp)

wow

so so good

no not good ... UHmazing

simply fabulous

good workk

on Dec. 8 2009 at 4:21 pm
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
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Thanks so much! It means a lot. :D

on Dec. 8 2009 at 4:18 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

awesome. simply amazing. great imagery and everything! :D

on Nov. 16 2009 at 9:00 pm
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
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Awww thank you! I really appreciate it. :D I shall be sure to check out your work, too!

Blessings!

on Nov. 14 2009 at 8:25 pm
mirrorsandmirages BRONZE, Timonium, Maryland
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This...this is really good. I mean, really really good.




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