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The Dead Girl. MAG

March 20, 2009
By Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
Courtney Billow BRONZE, Richfield, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 4 comments

I found the dead girl in a lake
while wandering a field
I watched the crows circle around
but somehow I could feel.

I saw her lying near the edge
to no fault of her own.
And walking nearer helped me see
that which I did not know.

I wanted to reach out to her
and grab her by the soul.
I wanted to hold on to her,
I dare not let her go.

I feel she’s lost so much, but if
I help her then she’ll see
the truth behind love in this life
and how real this love can be.

But someone’s let her down before.
Someone has let her fall.
And if her soul cannot find rest,
I fear she’ll lose it all.

Between my pity and her pain
she told me something true.
She feels that she’s lost everything
with nothing left to lose.

I’ve studied more intently, finding
fate’s no more than luck.
Just a gamble of “which way”
Does it deserve such trust?

Finally, I’ve found the nerve
to cradle up her soul
and send it flying far, far up
to the place I’ll never know.


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I was watching a movie. And suddenly I had THE urge....

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vrp31 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 9 2014 at 10:40 am
vrp31 BRONZE, Mumbai, Other
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Deep artistic piece of work!. Please continue writing!

on May. 23 2014 at 5:59 am
HermioneHainsworth PLATINUM, Leeds, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"There's always another book to read, and if not, write one."-me ;)

Truely amazing, my new favourite.  

on Apr. 23 2014 at 7:28 pm
Rebel21 PLATINUM, St. Catharines, Other
20 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where there is desire, there is gonna be a flame,
Where there is a flame someone's bound to get burned.
Just because it burns doesn't mean you're gonna die,
You've got to get up and try.

deeper than life. Truly amazing way to describe the thoughts of death and life; you looked deeper than just what we see. Very beautiful and inspiring.  

on Feb. 4 2014 at 7:57 pm
oliviajocson SILVER, Normal, Illinois
6 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Learning to love the process."

Wow! Great poem. I loved the imagery you used. Keep writing!

on Nov. 21 2013 at 12:05 pm
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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wooooooooooooooooowwwwwwwww

on Mar. 7 2013 at 9:53 am
CariePierce BRONZE, Lancaster, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination rules the world." -Napoleon Bonaparte

My fabourite part was the last line, where you refer to heaven as "the place I'll never know". I liked that. Alot. Well done, my friend.

on Jan. 24 2013 at 8:46 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

This is a cool poem. It's a metaphor though, right??

Duckie430 said...
on Jan. 30 2012 at 11:24 am
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
0 articles 0 photos 228 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

I'm not sure what this is about, but I like it.

on Jan. 8 2012 at 5:42 pm
cadencemoorehill BRONZE, Red Lodge, Montana
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
I am always wounded.

This is a great poem!!!!!!

on Nov. 3 2011 at 12:25 pm
purplebutterfly SILVER, Sweet Home, Oregon
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments
this is a very good poem i can see the deep meaning in it and its a poem that i can relate to in a way that i can not understand but i can feel that feeling...keep up the good work!

on Nov. 3 2011 at 12:11 pm
SophiaCross SILVER, Plattsburgh, New York
7 articles 3 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love, to be loved. To never forget your own insignificance. To never get used to the unspeakable violence and vulgar disparity of the life around you. To seek joy in the saddest places. To pursue beauty to its lair. To never simplify what is complicated or complicate what is simple. To respect strength, never power. Above all to watch. To try and understand. To never look away. And never, never to forget.”

I love this poem! It's so deep and I can relate to it.

Lacramosa said...
on Sep. 14 2011 at 10:20 am
This is nice and sweet I love the way it sounds and what it means I love this poem

on Jul. 16 2011 at 10:27 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Courtney, congrats! I have a question, how do you get a poem rated #1 and published on the first page? I love it <3

on Jul. 16 2011 at 10:26 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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how do you get a poem rated #1 and published on the first page?

on Jul. 16 2011 at 10:24 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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3 words. WOW! LOVE IT <3

on Jun. 24 2011 at 1:16 pm
Supriya PLATINUM, Palampur, Other
20 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poetry spills from the cracks of broken heart, but flows from the one which is loved.

Words are not enough to describe the excellency of this poem :)

Keep writing!


on Jun. 2 2011 at 10:17 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
10 articles 8 photos 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world, and stop it going to sleep.

~Salman Rushdie

lovely and amazing all the way!!! 5 stars. :D

on Jun. 2 2011 at 8:07 am
Deathbyflower, Richmond VA, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"All around me".

i  don't get it

on May. 11 2011 at 5:30 pm
NothingSpecial BRONZE, Conifer, Colorado
1 article 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
They teach us to stand out; yet they smash us into groups; they teach us to be happy; yet they demoralize us as life moves on; they teach us to listen; yet they ignore our questions; think about it. The teaching and learning system is screwed up.

This by far is my favorite peom!!! It explains how i feel about love in so many ways!!!

Duane BRONZE said...
on May. 9 2011 at 9:45 am
Duane BRONZE, Wathena, Kansas
3 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
What comes around goes around

This poem was so very captivating I was caught with the first three to four words 

keep it up and don't give up