Awaken … MAG

March 16, 2009
By Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
23 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
All's fair in love and war. Everyone loves everyone else, and the whole world is at war. So anything that you do is fair... break a girl's heart and tell me that, I'll believe you.


The rain falls on this gloomy day
15 days in the month or two before May
Gloomy, say I because you didn't say
A single word for many a day

Why is this? Did he say something that bad
Or is he that worthless; deserve I not feeling sad?
Every moment which passes drives him mad!
For goodness sake, have mercy on this lad!

This young lad of 17, whom you drive insane
Who considers you a gift; what his family considers a bane
For he's fallen for a beauty with the black sky so wide, flowing her mane
Answer his call, make him sane

For the longer you hold peace
The moments that pass make him think that you tease …
Tease him; in a way, to insanity … please
Give him his mind back and put him at ease

What did he do? Beside that obvious mistake
What did he do? What did it take
To silence you so much and make
You act so? Take …

Take this, fair maiden, as his last and final call
He means this very much, much more than all
His previous pleas. For this time … the order is very tall
On your decision stands his future; his rise or his fall

Call … hmph; rather his final plea
For, to him, you're his all … his glee
Without you … well, he's not gonna flee
To some distant land to which the usual losers flee

He will stay here and go on striving
Through thunder and rain, he'll go on driving
But like this rain which falls, his heart will be crying
Crying … crying … slowly dying … but still crying …

Arise from thy slumber, dear maiden … awake
And from this ditch, pull him out and take
Him; not to paradise, but back to earth and make
Him whole; lest his dreams in ashes you must take …

To
Mysterious Maiden
Body with lavender laden
c/o Ms. Queen Ice
Door No. 1, middle of paradise.



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on May. 12 2016 at 4:18 am
Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
23 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
All's fair in love and war. Everyone loves everyone else, and the whole world is at war. So anything that you do is fair... break a girl's heart and tell me that, I'll believe you.

Thank you very much. And I will. :)

on Sep. 4 2015 at 8:06 pm
KiraVogt2896 SILVER, La Canada Flintridge, California
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Favorite Quote:
'Our love is like the wind... I can’t see it, but I sure can feel it.' By Landon, A Walk To Remember. Movie and book.

This is beautiful! I really enjoyed reading! Keep on writing! :)

on Jan. 18 2015 at 2:53 pm
Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
23 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
All's fair in love and war. Everyone loves everyone else, and the whole world is at war. So anything that you do is fair... break a girl's heart and tell me that, I'll believe you.

Thank you very much

vrp31 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 9 2014 at 10:45 am
vrp31 BRONZE, Mumbai, Other
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beautiful! great rhyming. The last stanza takes the poem to a higher level.

on Nov. 21 2013 at 12:19 pm
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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(:              

on Nov. 21 2013 at 12:19 pm
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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Like the last stanza wow i just cant. so perfect so perfect 

on Nov. 21 2013 at 12:18 pm
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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I've read it so many times 

on Nov. 21 2013 at 12:18 pm
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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I just can't get over how amazing this is. 

on Nov. 21 2013 at 12:07 pm
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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This is just.... wow idk im speechless wooowwww

on Aug. 17 2011 at 8:22 pm
girlonfire95 GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over; smile because it happened."

-Dr. Seuss

This is very cool!  I like it a lot! Great work. I would appreciate your opinion on my work.

on Mar. 2 2011 at 1:16 am
Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
23 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
All's fair in love and war. Everyone loves everyone else, and the whole world is at war. So anything that you do is fair... break a girl's heart and tell me that, I'll believe you.

Thank you very much :) and at the moment its getting quite steamy :P

on Mar. 1 2011 at 4:51 pm
LightningForMyAllergies GOLD, White Bluff, Tennessee
11 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you look at me, you see only a fraction of my reflection, and my reflection shows only a fraction of me.

I love the last stanza or two the best :)). You're from India? That's awesome!! What is it like?

on Mar. 30 2010 at 2:01 pm
Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
23 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
All's fair in love and war. Everyone loves everyone else, and the whole world is at war. So anything that you do is fair... break a girl's heart and tell me that, I'll believe you.

Thanks a bunch! And it's lovely that my ballad here get's so much attention even after so much time. Thank you very much people!

on Mar. 29 2010 at 11:25 am
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

This is amazing...and I just have to compliment you even more with unspoken words-not many people know what a ballad really is and you do. I love this.

on Jan. 1 2010 at 5:11 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow okay i was reading this in magazine....i just had to find ya and leave a comment. Beautiful work. Just absolutely beautiful.

on Oct. 10 2009 at 10:38 am
that almost made me cry, good job and keep wrighting




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