The Loveless Cycle

There once was a sad child named Mike Greene,
He lived in a broken home,
His dad was a deadbeat, abusive and obscene,
And his mom made him feel all alone.

One day little Mike came home from school,
To show his Dad what he made,
But his dad didn’t care, he was drunk as a fool,
And for bothering him, Mike paid.

Little Mike became sadder and sadder,
For his Mom didn’t care and his Dad abused him,
His actions in school got badder and badder,
And everything just confused him.

Growing up without love, Mike was filled with fear,
And as he grew up, his classmates felt it,
Mike was mean to the kids but no one would hear,
That Mike could not have helped it.

When surrounded with hate, you are hateful yourself,
Anybody could see this with Mike,
But he became an outcast and never got help,
And drugs began tearing his life.

Then Mike dropped out of tenth grade,
For he hated school worse than his Father,
But it would have been no better if he stayed,
Would someone help him? No one would bother.

Mike worked a nine-to-five in fast food,
And he met a girl with the same situation,
He always was rude, but she was used to it, too,
And she “loved” him without contemplation.

She soon became pregnant and had their first child,
He was born in an old mobile home,
And surely that child would be just as wild,
And like Mike, would feel all alone.

Mike found out his girlfriend had an affair,
And he went into a mad fit of rage,
She tried to explain, but Mike didn’t care,
And his girlfriend quickly was slayed.

Mike thought no one would find out,
But the police quickly arrived,
Mike was sent off to prison no doubt,
But the little child survived.

But what will become of this child?
Could he possibly rise above?
The answer is no, the chances are mild,
For he too will grow up without love.





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Lenora W. said...
Sept. 17, 2013 at 8:25 am
Very well written. Good job. BUT there's no hope in there at all. Now, I know that not all sories have happy endings, but still. My mom grew up in an abusive home, but she is one of the gentless women you can know.
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 17, 2013 at 3:53 pm
Thanks for the feedback! I realized that this was a very depressing poem, and I was aiming to cast light on the horrors of domestic violence rather than to bring hope XD But I will definitely try to write some hopeful and positive poems in the future! :D
 
Fallenoutofgrace said...
Sept. 17, 2013 at 6:53 am
This is amazing! You did a brilliant job making it feel realistic and just original, i lvoed the ending the best with the kid of the loveless kid. You nailed all the feelings and i can't wait to see more from you becuase your are a true natural. :3
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 17, 2013 at 4:07 pm
Thanks!! :D
 
Midnight5765 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 9:19 pm
So sad and so true. I was very intrigued by your realistic story, keep them coming
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 9:43 pm
Thanks! :)
 
MargaritaAlely replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 11:47 pm
wow...I loved it..the relistic rage and the horrible ends...the inevitable..good job, 
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 11:51 pm
Thanks so much! :)
 
Hanban12 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 8:11 pm
This is awesome and really describes someone's life in depth. Great characterization and imagery; I love poetry and lyrics with a story behind them. You did great; this is very interesting and relatable. Keep writing, please! :)
 
Hanban12 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 8:14 pm
Oh! and i must add that the title is very original and sums up everything in the poem very well! :)
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 9:42 pm
iGracias! :D
 
EdithPiaf said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 8:00 pm
Nice job! Looking foward to more!! :D
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 9:40 pm
Thanks a lot! :D
 
TargonTheDragon said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 6:37 pm
yup this is good. i totally felt the emotion, even if it was a little unrefined. 5/5
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 6:43 pm
Thanks for the feedback!
 
LitttleMissSunshine said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 5:29 pm
this is amazing..the rhyme made me think of like Dr. Seuss for teens lol but this did make me cry
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 5:41 pm
Lol yeah XD That was the idea, contrasting a basic, cheery rhyme scheme with a dark message. Thanks for commenting!
 
Laugh-it-Out This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 5:25 pm
Ok, so you already know everything i said, cuz i told you before.....so im just gonna make yoour day by commenting! Overal a great piece. Just make the suggestions i suggested and then you will be all set. keep rockin       ~Liv
 
RokkoZee replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 5:42 pm
Thanks so much for the feedback!
 
Laugh-it-Out This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 8:24 pm
No prob dude. keep rockin
 
TurabianKnight This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 16, 2013 at 5:20 pm
I wish this poem was free verse. I think that there's a real kernel or literature in there but it feels really constrained by the rhyme/form.
 
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