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Submerged

April 25, 2013
By Priesty GOLD, Bloom, Indiana
Priesty GOLD, Bloom, Indiana
15 articles 2 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
So It Goes.

You're the Boss, Applesauce


Ice cold claws grip me as cold as sleet
Ripping and tearing as well as washing clean

It’s a mischievous monster whipping me around
Keeping me calm with the lack of sound

Lungs long lucid of lack of use
Ashamed buy their long, relentless abuse

My hair now octopus tentacles dancing about
Reaching for things, but their luck is out

The gray and black that clouds my eyes
Safe guards me from some frightening sights

Deep under in a place I’ll never bear to live
But for a moment of peace, I guess I can forgive



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on Jun. 5 2013 at 8:45 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

This is really cool. I like the beginning the most!

BekahBoo GOLD said...
on May. 13 2013 at 11:43 pm
BekahBoo GOLD, Battle Ground, Washington
10 articles 4 photos 7 comments
Great poem. Really liked the octopus metaphor.

Priesty GOLD said...
on May. 2 2013 at 7:29 pm
Priesty GOLD, Bloom, Indiana
15 articles 2 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
So It Goes.

You're the Boss, Applesauce

Thank you!  

on May. 2 2013 at 1:27 pm
freeperson DIAMOND, Burlington, Vermont
59 articles 0 photos 229 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Have you seen the way he looks at you, the way his expression softens and his eyes are like stars...?" - Ara Weston

this is so awesme I love the last stanza