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I walked to heaven’s gate today
among the skies so blue
with angels lurking here and there
waiting for someone new

I looked around for other souls
but the sky was empty so
i made my way to heaven’s gate
following the angels’ glow

when i reached, the angels all
blocked the gate in view
i boldly looked ahead and asked
please may i pass through?

You think it’s so easy then?
their voices echoed in my ears
how about you tell us what you did
all those earthly years?

I never skipped a day of school
and always helped the poor
I was happy with what i had
and never asked for more

so you deserve the life, they asked
beyond this eternal gate?
since you lived and liked and loved
heaven becomes your fate?

oh, no, it’s not so easy, child
you can’t just walk right by
have you forgetten what man is like?
they said with fiery eyes

I shook with fear but simply said
I know that man is wild
how is it though my fault at all?
i am just a child

But if your time had not come
and you still walked the earth
you too would be just like those
who raised and gave you birth

they care for only looks and gold
and kill their fellow beings
they cheat their friends and foes alike
and bomb those peaceful fields

they have no shame and honor left
like men used to have before
so why’d you think that heaven
has place for man anymore?

I closed my eyes in silence
my soul was now at stake
and I would have to suffer
for other men’s mistakes

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Abby96 said...
Feb. 7, 2013 at 5:12 pm:
I like how the rhyme enhanced as opposed to detracted frome the poem
 
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WaffleOcean2934This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 11, 2013 at 4:13 pm:
This a very thought-provoking poem.  Nice work on it!
 
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bubble1568 said...
Oct. 18, 2012 at 9:20 am:
this poem is very good and i think it should win
 
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Michaela M. said...
Jun. 28, 2012 at 10:21 am:
i read this all the time and everytime i come back feels better then the last. this is an amazing poem it really makes you think.
 
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irishlass317This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 12, 2012 at 10:26 pm:
This is really, really good!!! :D
 
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inkflowerKNC said...
Feb. 19, 2012 at 9:01 pm:
nice.....i really liked it. i just hope that plot is not real or else im gonna be a little concerned... XD
 
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Dolly9471 said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 2:00 pm:
WOW! So much emotion and sorrow packed into this.
 
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Dweathermankort This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 11:43 pm:
Great command of rhyming and allusion!
 
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Livelovewrite14 said...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 10:37 pm:
I'm relatively new to this wesbite...but so far, this poem, has been the best I have read. Can't wait to read what else you write!! :)
 
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eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 9:28 pm:
Really great opening - I was hooked from the first line! Also, interesting use of capitalization.
 
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Rheanne96 said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 4:46 pm:
e of the best poems i ever read.... keep writing its amazing! <3
 
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Villangel said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 6:10 pm:
This is riveting and mind blowing. I've never thought about it that way, you've opened my mind to new new ideas. You are an amazing writer.! Keep writing.!
 
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stars6 said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 2:11 pm:
i love this! *****
 
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LearnLoveLaugh said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 10:14 pm:
That was absolutely true, heartfelt, and honest. I really liked this! Nice work! ... Wow! I am really impressed!(:
 
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HateKnuckle said...
Oct. 16, 2011 at 10:10 pm:
I'm glad that not everyone believes in happy endings. Very nice and different to see a non forgiving side to heaven. 5 stars and please check out at least one of my poems please.
 
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ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes said...
Jun. 20, 2011 at 11:04 am:

Wow this is absoloutley amazing and true. I love it <3

If you ever have time could you read some of my poems and comment? Please and thank you(:

 
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aDreamer said...
May 12, 2011 at 8:58 am:
I LOVE THIS. reading it gave me goosebumps. really really great job:)
 
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Sara K. said...
May 9, 2011 at 8:45 pm:
This is truely very creative. I'm very impressed. I'm curious as to where you got the idea to write this?
 
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ShiroiBara said...
May 9, 2011 at 7:53 pm:
wow beautiful poem i love it
 
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ilovevolleyball35 said...
Apr. 20, 2011 at 6:58 pm:
I really love this!! Great work(:
 
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