Heaven's Gate MAG

September 6, 2008
By Binte SILVER, -, Other
Binte SILVER, -, Other
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I walked to heaven’s gate today
among the skies so blue
with angels lurking here and there
waiting for someone new

I looked around for other souls
but the sky was empty so
i made my way to heaven’s gate
following the angels’ glow

when i reached, the angels all
blocked the gate in view
i boldly looked ahead and asked
please may i pass through?

You think it’s so easy then?
their voices echoed in my ears
how about you tell us what you did
all those earthly years?

I never skipped a day of school
and always helped the poor
I was happy with what i had
and never asked for more

so you deserve the life, they asked
beyond this eternal gate?
since you lived and liked and loved
heaven becomes your fate?

oh, no, it’s not so easy, child
you can’t just walk right by
have you forgetten what man is like?
they said with fiery eyes

I shook with fear but simply said
I know that man is wild
how is it though my fault at all?
i am just a child

But if your time had not come
and you still walked the earth
you too would be just like those
who raised and gave you birth

they care for only looks and gold
and kill their fellow beings
they cheat their friends and foes alike
and bomb those peaceful fields

they have no shame and honor left
like men used to have before
so why’d you think that heaven
has place for man anymore?

I closed my eyes in silence
my soul was now at stake
and I would have to suffer
for other men’s mistakes


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on Mar. 26 2015 at 10:50 am
Lysander PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I slay.

gr8 work!!!

Abby96 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 7 2013 at 5:12 pm
Abby96 BRONZE, Leesburg, Virginia
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I like how the rhyme enhanced as opposed to detracted frome the poem

on Jan. 11 2013 at 4:13 pm
WaffleOcean2934 PLATINUM, Rogers, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams-Eleanor Roosevelt

This a very thought-provoking poem.  Nice work on it!

bubble1568 said...
on Oct. 18 2012 at 9:20 am
this poem is very good and i think it should win

on Jun. 28 2012 at 10:21 am
michaela mrianda BRONZE, Temporary, Other
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i read this all the time and everytime i come back feels better then the last. this is an amazing poem it really makes you think.

irishlass317 said...
on Mar. 12 2012 at 10:26 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

This is really, really good!!! :D

inkflowerKNC said...
on Feb. 19 2012 at 9:01 pm
inkflowerKNC, Townsend, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"When at first you don't succeed, try, try again."

nice.....i really liked it. i just hope that plot is not real or else im gonna be a little concerned... XD

on Jan. 28 2012 at 2:00 pm
Dolly9471 BRONZE, Berkeley Heights, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
In the end will will not remember the words of our enemies, but the silence of our friends.
Martin Luther King Jr.

WOW! So much emotion and sorrow packed into this.

Dkort BRONZE said...
on Jan. 7 2012 at 11:43 pm
Dkort BRONZE, Encino, California
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Great command of rhyming and allusion!

on Jan. 6 2012 at 10:37 pm
Livelovewrite14 BRONZE, Salina, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm the author of my own life. Unfortuneately, i'm writing with pen. So I cannot erase my mistakes"-Unknown

I'm relatively new to this wesbite...but so far, this poem, has been the best I have read. Can't wait to read what else you write!! :)

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:28 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Really great opening - I was hooked from the first line! Also, interesting use of capitalization.

on Dec. 18 2011 at 4:46 pm
Rheanne96 SILVER, Lancaster, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't like something change it. If you can't change it, change your attitude". - Maya Angelou

e of the best poems i ever read.... keep writing its amazing! <3

on Dec. 15 2011 at 6:10 pm
Karles_Ivy PLATINUM, Sunnyside, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the bully isn’t the captain of the cheerleaders or the girl who for some reason has it out for only you; sometimes the worst bully of them all is you.- Karles_Ivy

This is riveting and mind blowing. I've never thought about it that way, you've opened my mind to new new ideas. You are an amazing writer.! Keep writing.!

stars6 said...
on Dec. 15 2011 at 2:11 pm
i love this! *****

on Nov. 1 2011 at 10:14 pm
LearnLoveLaugh SILVER, Spokane, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughs would make me cry." by Unknown

That was absolutely true, heartfelt, and honest. I really liked this! Nice work! ... Wow! I am really impressed!(:

on Oct. 16 2011 at 10:10 pm
HateKnuckle SILVER, Peru, New York
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I'm glad that not everyone believes in happy endings. Very nice and different to see a non forgiving side to heaven. 5 stars and please check out at least one of my poems please.

on Jun. 20 2011 at 11:04 am
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over,
Smile because it happened."


-Dr. Suess

Wow this is absoloutley amazing and true. I love it <3

If you ever have time could you read some of my poems and comment? Please and thank you(:


aDreamer GOLD said...
on May. 12 2011 at 8:58 am
aDreamer GOLD, Redondo Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
everyone is entitled to be stupid, but some abuse the privilege

the pursuit of happiness is a most ridiculous notion, if you pursue happiness you'll never find it

a hero is no braver than an ordinary man, but he is braver for 5 minutes longer

I LOVE THIS. reading it gave me goosebumps. really really great job:)

on May. 9 2011 at 8:45 pm
Ineedsleep SILVER, Marshfield, Massachusetts
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This is truely very creative. I'm very impressed. I'm curious as to where you got the idea to write this?

ShiroiBara said...
on May. 9 2011 at 7:53 pm
ShiroiBara, Valmeyer, Illinois
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wow beautiful poem i love it




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