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I walked to heaven’s gate today
among the skies so blue
with angels lurking here and there
waiting for someone new

I looked around for other souls
but the sky was empty so
i made my way to heaven’s gate
following the angels’ glow

when i reached, the angels all
blocked the gate in view
i boldly looked ahead and asked
please may i pass through?

You think it’s so easy then?
their voices echoed in my ears
how about you tell us what you did
all those earthly years?

I never skipped a day of school
and always helped the poor
I was happy with what i had
and never asked for more

so you deserve the life, they asked
beyond this eternal gate?
since you lived and liked and loved
heaven becomes your fate?

oh, no, it’s not so easy, child
you can’t just walk right by
have you forgetten what man is like?
they said with fiery eyes

I shook with fear but simply said
I know that man is wild
how is it though my fault at all?
i am just a child

But if your time had not come
and you still walked the earth
you too would be just like those
who raised and gave you birth

they care for only looks and gold
and kill their fellow beings
they cheat their friends and foes alike
and bomb those peaceful fields

they have no shame and honor left
like men used to have before
so why’d you think that heaven
has place for man anymore?

I closed my eyes in silence
my soul was now at stake
and I would have to suffer
for other men’s mistakes

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irishlass317This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 12 at 10:26 pm:
This is really, really good!!! :D
 
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inkflowerKNCThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 19 at 9:01 pm:
nice.....i really liked it. i just hope that plot is not real or else im gonna be a little concerned... XD
 
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Dolly9471This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 28 at 2:00 pm:
WOW! So much emotion and sorrow packed into this.
 
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Dweathermankort This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7 at 11:43 pm:
Great command of rhyming and allusion!
 
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Livelovewrite14 said...
Jan. 6 at 10:37 pm:
I'm relatively new to this wesbite...but so far, this poem, has been the best I have read. Can't wait to read what else you write!! :)
 
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eliana924This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 9:28 pm:
Really great opening - I was hooked from the first line! Also, interesting use of capitalization.
 
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Rheanne96This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 4:46 pm:
e of the best poems i ever read.... keep writing its amazing! <3
 
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VillangelThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 6:10 pm:
This is riveting and mind blowing. I've never thought about it that way, you've opened my mind to new new ideas. You are an amazing writer.! Keep writing.!
 
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stars6 said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 2:11 pm:
i love this! *****
 
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LearnLoveLaughThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 10:14 pm:
That was absolutely true, heartfelt, and honest. I really liked this! Nice work! ... Wow! I am really impressed!(:
 
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HateKnuckleThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 16, 2011 at 10:10 pm:
I'm glad that not everyone believes in happy endings. Very nice and different to see a non forgiving side to heaven. 5 stars and please check out at least one of my poems please.
 
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ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes said...
Jun. 20, 2011 at 11:04 am:

Wow this is absoloutley amazing and true. I love it <3

If you ever have time could you read some of my poems and comment? Please and thank you(:

 
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aDreamer said...
May 12, 2011 at 8:58 am:
I LOVE THIS. reading it gave me goosebumps. really really great job:)
 
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Sara K. said...
May 9, 2011 at 8:45 pm:
This is truely very creative. I'm very impressed. I'm curious as to where you got the idea to write this?
 
farah This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 11, 2011 at 3:05 pm :

i had this book of thoughtful poems. they were all so good, made me wanto write something of my own

 

 
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ShiroiBaraThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 9, 2011 at 7:53 pm:
wow beautiful poem i love it
 
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ilovevolleyball35 said...
Apr. 20, 2011 at 6:58 pm:
I really love this!! Great work(:
 
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Artist4lif3 said...
Apr. 3, 2011 at 11:51 am:
LOVED IT!!!! i rlly like how in the last stanza you left the reader hangin, wondering what happened:)) KEEP IT UP!
 
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buggzbunnie said...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 9:49 pm:
this is the best i have read yet this poem is indescribable . the last stanza sent tingles through my body . fantastic job !
 
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WerewolfWriting said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 4:50 pm:
Oh my gosh! This was INCREDIBLE. Not only was the rhyme sceme perfect, but each line was neat and sensible and perfectly at place. You are a fantastic poet! 5 stars times 1,000,000! Good job! :)
 
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z-bo_teh_post_legend said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 1:27 pm:
this imagery was so beautiful... It gave me such a good picture of everything in the poem.
 
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truelyblue said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 11:39 am:
This ballad spoke to me! I feel as if i am talking to the angnles
 
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WenUlookmeIntheEyesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 10:18 pm:
Wow, that was an amazing poem!!! Excellent work!!! :D
 
Alasia B. replied...
Jan. 14, 2011 at 5:49 pm :
great great great is all i can say!!!!!
 
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sarahbug16 said...
Dec. 31, 2010 at 12:39 pm:
BRAVO! HOW PRETTY! FANTASTIC! AMAZING! too many words to describe it.....
 
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red rose said...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 2:01 pm:
myyyyyyy favorite
 
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l_emmalyn07This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 25, 2010 at 6:43 pm:
this is soooo good!!! it's one of my favorites:)))
 
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Jolvin said...
Nov. 14, 2010 at 5:34 pm:
Really nice!!
 
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I_Am_A_Dreamer said...
Sept. 12, 2010 at 5:13 pm:
This is so good! Totally 5 stars!
 
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chastity said...
Sept. 12, 2010 at 4:26 pm:
i love it it gets in details
 
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SnickerLover said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 9:27 pm:

LOVE IT!!! gosh... so descriptive. couldnt be better. 5 stars

 

 
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DiamondsIntheGrassThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 12:05 pm:
A. MAZE. ING. this is awesome. how its poetic and speechy.  and how even though it was a little long you held my attention.  awesome.
 
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TheOcherousRodentia said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 9:42 am:
CLAP CLAP CLAP! IT WAS AMAZING, YOU ARE AMAZING! I loved how you gave poetic speech to the characters in the poems, and made it flow smoothly. The message is just inspiring, and touching. And it didnt use the descriptive cliche of angels with feathered wings, or standing on clouds, you indirectly made the reader imagine their own heaven! GREAT WORK, keep it up, you get 10 STARS(too bad theres only 5)
 
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farah This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 7, 2010 at 11:58 am:
thanks guy ill check out your work :)
 
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StandardToaster said...
Jun. 28, 2010 at 7:15 pm:
oh my gosh, this really sent a shiver down my spine!  this is so haunting and true at the same time.  people better shape up i guess!  check out my work plz?
 
Jellybean9898This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 1, 2010 at 4:03 pm :
this was really good, and i really admire your work.  i think it is so true, how man on earth is pretty destructive.  call me a peace-lovin hippie, but those angels are right!  and great job on the poem overall, btw.  i liked it a lot. :)  check out my work?
 
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randomfluff said...
Jun. 13, 2010 at 1:55 pm:
this is amazing! it really deep! great job :)
 
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DaylightDarknessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 11, 2010 at 5:41 pm:
This is so incredible. I read it aloud to on of my friend, and my dad, who happened to hear, clapped for it. It's so deep and meaningful- just amazing.
 
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AlexSerino said...
Apr. 30, 2010 at 9:40 am:
<3 This is really gooooooood
 
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annexgreyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 6:13 am:
Amazing beyond words, and the very meaning of inspirational. It's beautiful. I love it.
 
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Demon_of_Truth said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 2:30 pm:
Wow, that was deep, And, i agree, one shouldn't have to suffer for the actions of another . . . If that's what you were trying to say, I never was good at interpreting things.  :)
 
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Adele C. said...
Apr. 8, 2010 at 6:38 pm:
This was amazing!
 
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SoundndBeyndNoiz said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 9:02 pm:
i am really glad i found this poem, though i don't have the same views i can still appreciate it. i have been look for a ballad to inspire me and this is it :)
 
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olivera said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 3:19 pm:
wow that was amazing (: everything was well written and the message was clear. the rhyming made sense with the actual poem, if you get what i mean by that XD one of my favorite poems ever (: props my friend!
 
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Taylor-pop said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 10:55 pm:
Omg your an amazing writer.
you write beautlfully! xx
 
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Pa S. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 6:35 pm:
i am speechless. kudoz to u. i'd rate it twice if i could.
 
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Emokittiy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 3:11 pm:
you r an excellent writer. i love your work!!!!!!
 
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*~Lynx~* said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 2:42 pm:
beautiful just beautiful
 
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Aurora said...
Dec. 22, 2009 at 8:13 pm:
it was deep and yet i could understand it! i love it and i do hope you have more great rhymes like these to share in more poems
 
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MissyMaeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 17, 2009 at 5:46 pm:
I love it!!! amazing........ gives the message well and and amazingly written =D keep it up x
 
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