Indifferent Abandon

February 15, 2013
By Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski


I can’t feel this numbness spreading,
I only know it’s there.
See its mark crawling up my arms,
The black and blue I wear.

Vast in its own emptiness,
The cold seeps through my veins.
You think I’d fight to stay alive,
By now I’m cast in chains.

I’m trembling with shame and pain,
The kind that claims the heart.
I wish I’d learned to carve the ice,
And not be made a part.


The author's comments:
Ignore the picture. I thought it was cute:)

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on Jun. 11 2013 at 8:40 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Aww thank you so much!!!! :)

on Jun. 11 2013 at 10:26 am
freeperson DIAMOND, Burlington, Vermont
60 articles 0 photos 230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Have you seen the way he looks at you, the way his expression softens and his eyes are like stars...?" - Ara Weston

I love this I actually copied it to microsoft and took it with me everywhere... :)

on Apr. 5 2013 at 5:37 pm
I read this over and over again, and it's really good. I just believe that you could have added so much more to it; I understand the picture you are paiting, but you could have added so much imagery to this!! :) It's beautiul.. great job  

on Apr. 1 2013 at 8:04 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  This is very relatable for me. I love the imagery you used. :)

on Mar. 27 2013 at 6:16 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

you commented on a thread I posted, but I always like to see who's looking at my stuff...and you know repay it...:)

on Mar. 27 2013 at 4:09 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you!!!!!! Have I commented on anything of yours before?

on Mar. 27 2013 at 2:28 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

oh my gosh this is beautiful. I was going to say the picture doesn't match but... I guess you got that. it is so sad and perfect, I love it!

on Mar. 11 2013 at 4:04 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Haha, thanks, I love the hunger games :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 11 2013 at 3:56 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

The last two lines remind of The Hunger Games when Peeta tells Katniss that he doesn't want to be another part of the entertainment of the Capitol. To me, the poem speaks of one of the greatest truths: be true to yourself.

on Mar. 10 2013 at 8:39 am
jonpettigrew SILVER, Oak Ridge, Tennessee
5 articles 0 photos 12 comments
great poempoem it really shines on the last couple of lines

on Mar. 7 2013 at 12:34 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Okay,...Sure, I posted another one titled "What She's Worth" this one is different but fiercer and well more me...

on Mar. 6 2013 at 3:43 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Will do! I'd love to read it:). Maybe remind me once it posts, please?

on Mar. 6 2013 at 10:14 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

You're welcome! Hey, I submitted a poem titled "She" I can't wait for you to read it.... I hope you like it! Can you guess what it's about..though duh it's quite obvious..anyway, I might not come on for a while, so do check it out when it gets posted. Love. Me. xoxox

on Mar. 5 2013 at 11:02 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you saphira!

on Mar. 5 2013 at 10:22 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

WOW. The last 2 lines totally took my breath away! Good Poem!

on Mar. 4 2013 at 9:30 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you :)

on Mar. 4 2013 at 5:10 pm
WaffleOcean2934 PLATINUM, Rogers, Minnesota
42 articles 9 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams-Eleanor Roosevelt

I can really relate to this.  Nice work on it!


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