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this river

April 10, 2012
By gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
20 articles 3 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"next time you feel like a failure, think about how you are alive, and you have the opportunity to be successful."

"i don't have an attitude, i have a personality you can't handle"

"i am weird"


I walk along this river.
It is a lonely place.
When I look to see my reflection,
I see a sad face.

I sit beside this river.
I am throwing rocks inside.
Every time I watch a rock sink without trying to float.
I think of how I never tried.

I sleep next to this river.
I wake up to see it still flowing,
Every new day I expect something less.
It shows my life and the never knowing.

One day I realized.
When I sat by the river and cried.
My tears make this river deeper.
This is a river that flows from my eyes



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on Jan. 10 2013 at 6:34 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
67 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

AWESOME! keep writing bro :)

on Jun. 5 2012 at 1:59 pm
AllysonMarie GOLD, Gardner, Massachusetts
12 articles 25 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Only an Aunt can give hugs like a mother, can keep secrets like a sister, and share love like a friend.”

I really like this poem.! personally, my favorite part was how some of the lines rhym but not all. That way is gives it more of a profesional structure rather then it sounding like a class project. Awesome job!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 16 2012 at 4:47 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey!

this is my favourite poem! i love the intended meaning. it also flows very well , like a river (pls excuse the bad pun =P). very very beautiful . great work and keep writing XD


Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2012 at 1:18 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

This is pretty good and I liked it. You could add a little more to this and make it a miny story if you wanted to. Like express a message, but nonetheless this is very good!

I was also hoping you could read two of my poems: "Imagination" and "The Story of a Holocaust Survivor" when you get the change.