Autumn Song

October 2, 2011
By StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi


In stopping on the silent path
And breathing in the quiet air
And listening for nothing there,
I heard the nothing say:

We are small and we are brave
Marching through and passing by;
Brothers of the silken moon,
Daughters of the treeless sky.

We are stars, in death so small
We are ants, from blackness born:
Our silent work, our silent lives
Do not deserve the giants’ scorn

For we, immortal, underground
In perfect silence sing our songs:
You are here, and this is now,
And soon, O giant, you’ll be gone.


The author's comments:
Just somethin' I came up with. :)

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on Oct. 31 2011 at 8:39 am
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Wow, thank you! ^-^ Favourite poem, huh? I'm honored! :)

on Oct. 30 2011 at 9:48 pm
milforce SILVER, Bloomington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Those who have the ability to act, have the responsibility to act."

Oh my gosh, I love this so much! It's really amazing!! Honestly, I think this is my favorite poem and that's not out of just the poems here on TeenInk! Awesome work!

on Oct. 21 2011 at 4:49 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Wow! :) That's new. I'm glad you liked it that much.

on Oct. 21 2011 at 4:48 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Thank you very much!

on Oct. 17 2011 at 2:07 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

This is a good treatment of Autumn. Some lines, such as the giants' scorn one, don't make much sense within the narrative, but the metaphors are great. 

on Oct. 14 2011 at 8:18 pm
SagaLiSela PLATINUM, Boonsboro, Maryland
27 articles 27 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love you."

Simple as that.

Or not that simple.

I love the irony of singing songs it silence. It's strong, rebellious, and moving! This piece reads beautifully. I found myself reading it aloud!

on Oct. 12 2011 at 8:38 am
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
36 articles 17 photos 391 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Thank you both very much! :) sunny.all.day, I can see why this bothered you now that I look closer... I don't think "you will" would have fit in as well with the meter, but I could have reworked it anyway... :| Ah well. Thanks again! ^-^

GreyGirl ELITE said...
on Oct. 12 2011 at 4:31 am
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
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Beautiful! STirring! You are a true poet-- my favorite was "the silken moon" Keep it uP *****

on Oct. 11 2011 at 8:29 pm
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
— A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)
"writing is a struggle against silence" carlos fuentos
You miss 100% of the shots you don't take."

Wow, this is amazing!! And its just "something you came up with".... well the only slight thing that's bothering me is the last line, I feel like to match the poem, it should be "you will be gone" instead of "you'll" because it just sounds more smooth? But I don't want to tell you how to write your poem :/


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