Unfolding-- to Dust

September 16, 2011
By Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran


I

One morning when I unfolded
This was what I heard
In the fabric of a prayer shawl
From the hymnal of a bird

From the wolves was lamentation
From the serpent—a weeping sound
From the butterfly—a battle cry!
And the howling of a hound
In the silence I heard the answer
To God’s questions unto Job
In my breath I heard the broken sigh
When Joseph quit his robe
I heard the madmen settling down
I heard the scholars rail
Said the beggar “I am able”
Said the giant “I am frail”
I heard the rustling olive branch
Amid the whistle of the dove
Said the monarch “Here—your freedom”
Said the cynic “I’m in love”

II

One morning when I unfolded
This is what I beheld
In the streaming of the sunbeams
And the oceans as they swelled

I saw the canyons perish
I watched the rivers dry
The LORD re-writing history
In the corner of his eye
I glimpsed the Resurrection
I saw the kingdom come
I envisioned a modern exodus
And living martyrdom
The clouds performed a cosmic dance
The waters, in tune, did part
Through the ribcage of a ghost
I read a transparent heart
I saw the sages sorrowful
And the poets overjoyed
The stars with solemn voices
Stumbling into the void

III

One morning when I unfolded
This is what I felt
As the angels beckoned “come to us”
And the Summer whispered “melt”

I felt a certain sadness
But could not trace the source
Was it the grievance of the righteous man?
Or the wicked man’s remorse?
Then I felt a certain happiness
And knew from whence it came
The smile on my lover’s face
The healing of the lame
Laughter rippled through the air
Oh the ash of sacred fire
To heaven—dying men return
To life—we all retire
A caress, a kiss, a warm embrace
And I was swept away
By the fluidity of time and space
And the nakedness of day

IV

In honor of what came to pass
And all that is untold
I pray that we may sit quite still
To watch the world unfold


The author's comments:
This was a tricky poem indeed. It was born in my mind on a windy September night with the full moon as my guide, but its form was so delicate that I didn't know how to care for it. Whenever I went inside to write it down, it seemed to dissolve into the air, as if it was only supposed to exist as raw thought. Nevertheless, I captured the vapor, and here is the poem you asked for without knowing it.

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on Feb. 23 2013 at 8:06 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Maybe you captured much more than just the vapor...This is so deep and thought-provoking and the title is perfect! I am amazed by how you capture a reader's interest from the very first line.... This was amazing.. And I was happy to read it because I was glad that someone else thinks about these things too,... Everything is so perfectly put and it seems as if you never really make an effort to create a rhyme (WHich I love by the way) , it's as if it just comes and keeps coming....LOved it! 5/5

KylieK GOLD said...
on Aug. 19 2012 at 6:22 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
11 articles 0 photos 270 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

Gorgeous!   Thank God someone reads the Bible these days. Or, are these dreams?

leafy said...
on May. 13 2012 at 1:31 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Aye...wow. I must say, I think this is one of my favorite poems of yours I've read yet. The clouds performed a cosmic dance and The stars with solemn voices/Stumbling into the void – simply delicious, the imagery is amazing (not that I should expect any less from you ;) )

I can't remember if I have told you this yet or not, but whenever I am craving some wonderful poetry, I always click onto you profile to quench my thirst, since I know your pieces will never let me down

I agree with Aderes, as well - you should definitely try to publish a book of your poetry. If you do, please tell me :)

On a slightly random note, what do you know of synesthesia?

on Dec. 9 2011 at 3:15 pm
RedFeather GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
Prose is like walking but poetry is like dancing.
—Paul Valery, poet (1871 - 1945)

Yet another editor's choice award. Have any of your poems not gotten that check mark? Still, it's easy to see why, though I think that a lot of these should be published in the magazine too. Great poem - again. I'm running out of things to say to each of them.

on Sep. 26 2011 at 7:43 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

A question, why is your work published anonymously?

on Sep. 26 2011 at 7:43 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I thank you dearly, dear duckie.

Duckie430 said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 7:15 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
0 articles 0 photos 229 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

wow, amazing work here. i really like this poem

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 8:19 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

That's what that red check next to the title means...

on Sep. 24 2011 at 8:06 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

That anyone would read my work in such a way gives me a little shiver of happiness that crawls up my back, and perches on my shoulder, and hops into my heart to end up as, ha ha, a 'little squeal of delight!'

The raven you saw must have been an omen, Stargirl; I've been reading about them in The Alchemist. Have you read that wonderful, wonderful book? Anyway, did the raven make any noise, or was it a silent raven?

I must read this waterless mountain, and see if my heart is mirrored and covered as well.


on Sep. 24 2011 at 6:04 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Oh, and I noticed it got editor's choice, congrats, Raven, you have my heartfelt congratulations, I believe that is an award well-merited, and full of meaning. 

on Sep. 24 2011 at 6:02 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

When I found this in my email yesterday, I gave a little squeal of delight, but I only read the first line last night. I wanted to read it when I had time to ponder, and truly write out a comment on the computer, my first impression fresh and fragrant on my mind. That, to me, is really the only way to read your work, however impatient I may be. 

I wanted to tell you, I really the see a raven the other day, on the way out to our car. It wheeled softly in the sky overhead, but disappeared from sight behind a tree all too soon.

I love the first line of the poem. It draped itself around my heart immediately after I had read it. The whole poem rather reminds me of all that I read in "Waterless Mountain", a book that has managed to drape itself around my heart, and find itself mirrored there. 

It is a joy to be reading a new poem of yours, it always is. 


on Sep. 24 2011 at 2:10 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Actually, that's exactly how I'm feeling.  I just need to remind myself that their projection of God is not necessarily true.

on Sep. 24 2011 at 2:03 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

As for the kindred spirit,

When I wander in the desert

It seems to disappear

For want of my precious guide

I collapse in fateful fear.

But today I found that my spirit

Went in me, not away

To help me deal with the desert

And the nakedness of day.


Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 2:02 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Your bundles are also bundles of joy! :) Dedicate it to Aicha, because that's my real name! :)

on Sep. 24 2011 at 2:00 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Aderes, your comments are always bundles of joy and of sincerity, and I open the bundles, always, with delight.

By the chance that I ever get a book of poetry published, I will make sure to include you in the dedication for your encouragement. ;)

And we celebrate his/her return!


on Sep. 24 2011 at 1:58 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Here's the way I look at it, Liz.

God was always here, and God will always be here. He was there way before us, way before Christians, way before the church, way before humans, way before the earth. Perhaps you have trouble believing in God (if I understand correctly) because the God that people are convincing you to believe in isn't the God in which your heart yearns to believe.


on Sep. 24 2011 at 1:35 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I guess I'm just tired of people telling me to believe something just because they tell me to.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 1:29 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Boos-flash is back! :)

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 1:27 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

This poem is exquisite, yet another product of your genius. :) I love how the second stanza everything is the opposite of what it's supposed to be. The third stanza captured my mood yesterday perfectly. The fourth stanza captured something of great importance. It's such a great ending. You should publish a book of your poetry with Penguin group. Get together some of your best poetry and send it to them! See their requirements and just do it! :) And if they reject you, try another time! I want your poetry to get published in a real book!

on Sep. 24 2011 at 1:17 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

How wonderful to hear that?

What faith issues have you struggled with (of course, you don't have to answer if you don't desire to)?





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