You Were Made MAG

February 22, 2011
By theUnknownandtheAnonymous PLATINUM, Stockton, California
theUnknownandtheAnonymous PLATINUM, Stockton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"All that is required for evil to prevail is for good men to do nothing." - Edmund Burke


Your Milky Way hair
Pulls me into the wonder
Worth taking hundreds of years
To travel to

It took billions of years
Before you came along
But I know in another billion years
I won't find another you

It's like I'm gazing
At a shooting star
That coincidentally
Fell at my feet

When your night meets day
A cacophony of colors race through my mind
You're able to break my heart
So delicately

You were made from
Stars and planets
I can tell from the cosmos
Contained in your eyes

Trying to understand your wonder
Is like fitting the ocean in a cup
But darling
Won't you let me try?



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on Nov. 25 2011 at 11:40 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

I managed to put Fools' Walk on my favorites through a gl.itch, could you click on my name and check it out?

on Nov. 22 2011 at 7:27 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Both of them got approved this moring! They're anonnymous, though, I didn't think I was gonna want to show them to anyone when I submitted them. They're called "Lonely Fires" and "Fool's Walk", please take a look at them, they're the first peoms I've put up on this site.

on Nov. 21 2011 at 6:38 pm
theUnknownandtheAnonymous PLATINUM, Stockton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"All that is required for evil to prevail is for good men to do nothing." - Edmund Burke

I honestly don't know. I've had longer titles for my other poems than this one, trust me on that. They all came out fine except for this one. And that's cool, I'll give them a read when I can!

on Nov. 21 2011 at 6:27 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Interesting! That is a much better title. If you had know it needed to be shorter, what would you have named it instead?

I've submitted four poems by the way, and I think two of them you'd really like, but they haven't been approved yet....... sucks.


on Nov. 21 2011 at 6:11 pm
theUnknownandtheAnonymous PLATINUM, Stockton, California
25 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All that is required for evil to prevail is for good men to do nothing." - Edmund Burke

Why thank you, I appreciate it. And concerning the title: it was originally titled "You Were Made From Stars And Planets," but for some reason the site shortened it. But other than that, it's still the same.

on Nov. 21 2011 at 3:23 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

.......holy cow........there is no doubt in my mind that this is going to shoot right up to the top of the charts in no time. It has an unusual title, though, is it some personal conceit of yours?




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