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We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

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IndiloveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 14 at 8:19 am:
I love this!!!! The flow, the wording, the style, the relativity, the amazing concept! You are a fantastic writer!!!!! 
 
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SkylerTheBraveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 14 at 1:16 am:
This was really well written. I enjoyed reading this greatly. Keep up the good work. 
 
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JackieSeviThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 22 at 5:03 pm:
wow.. I love it! 
 
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pandagirl312 said...
Apr. 15 at 1:11 pm:
Love the rhyme, great poem overall. I can really connect...great job!
 
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writer3499This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 31 at 5:14 pm:
This is sooo good!!! Amazing
 
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MysteriousWoundsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 31 at 4:52 pm:
i love this! it flows so wonderfully ^_^
 
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dreamshakerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 9 at 8:51 pm:
this was absolutely amazing! I loved it!
 
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Nicole67This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 9 at 12:02 pm:
that was amazing! i have felt that way about relationships! keep writing ill be looking forward to reading your work. :)
 
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samisk3wl said...
Feb. 6 at 2:34 pm:
This was amazing! I liked the mention of cinderella and the titanic, it was very creative!
 
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beautifulspiritThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 2 at 9:28 pm:
Wow what a shockingly realistic ending to an otherwise happily ever after story. Maybe because fairy tales are not real---you broke the chain. The reference to Cinderella and Prince Charming was good though.
 
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Kate298This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 25 at 3:44 pm:
Love this! :) Check out my work as well please? :)
 
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DancingFingertips said...
Jan. 25 at 2:15 pm:
I hate the break the chain of elated readers, but I just wanted to offer some constructive criticism. I thought you really broke the flow with this line: "We were shooting toward a happy ending, And we missed." Once I read that, I couldn't help but stop dead. It took me a second to get back into it; it might have worked better if the rhythm of the last line was the same as the one above it. But congrats, I really liked the allusion to Prince Charming and Cinderella as well. Cheerfully Depressing... (more »)
 
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eliana924This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 9:36 pm:
Great job! I like the way you reference fairy-tales to highlight your point.
 
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ElleNicole said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:42 pm:
Hey, this is good. Mind checking out my work? Thanks.
 
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aveawaveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 3:10 pm:
Way to go! :D
 
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lemondrop16 said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 1:54 pm:
I absolutely love this.
 
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SmartTartThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 9:07 pm:
I liked it! i can aqree. Made me feel that fantasy is as far as can be from reality
 
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shreya756 said...
Nov. 20, 2011 at 8:32 am:

I really love this.

Good job. Funy though, how this poem talks about the warmth that's non existant and while reading, I felt so grateful that it Prince Charming did come. It made me feel grateful for the wamth that still exists. It's amazing how sometimes we need fairytales to be able to piece together our reality. 

Really well done.

 
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TheWhiteFlowerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 14, 2011 at 3:16 pm:
one word= W O W!!!!!
 
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BeccaAnne said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 3:15 pm:
Absolutely Amazing! Keep it up!
 
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LahariThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 29, 2011 at 11:46 am:

This is really good! Wow.

This is AMAZING! The rhyme fits perfectly and the words are precisely chosen. Can you check out some of my work? 

 
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Dudet95This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 11:25 am:
You are a very good writer.This has very good rhyme to it, and you used very discriptive words which I love!Its such a sad poem but it relates more to real life actions, because sadly life is not all about happy endings.I love how you encorperated Cinderella into this story and prince charming.:)amazing job 
 
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Kelssssie said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 9:37 am:
This is reallly good, and i can relate alot to it..(:
 
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JojoMimiThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 7:06 pm:
wow. very good
 
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WordscantsayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 15, 2011 at 11:40 pm:
Love it , so sweet, sad and cute!!!! 10 out of 10!!!!
 
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always_dance_in_the_rainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 15, 2011 at 9:22 am:
Fantastic! You were really able to put a lot of emotion in it without it seeming too heavy. Great job! Keep writing
 
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UnleashYourMindThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 8:23 am:
This is pretty amazing.. it's so creative and different but true all the same. I absolutly love it. 5 stars :)
 
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HateKnuckleThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 7:48 pm:
Very descriptive way to say its over. Loved the whole idea. 5 stars.
 
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LonexwolfThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 11:12 am:
It shows lots of meaning, and lots of truthful meanings to this work of art. I love it a lot. <3
 
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Jul. 26, 2011 at 10:34 am:
i loved the mention of all the fairytale stories!!!!
 
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whitstar27 said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 8:35 pm:
I like how it didn't have a happy ending, because in reality there often isn't a happy ending or the ending we wanted.
 
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CryswithalyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 8:05 pm:
Breathtaking and AMAZING.
 
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EyesofBlueFireThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 7:12 pm:

This truly took my heart for a ride. I was taken in at the very first line. Keep writing!

I could use a little feedback on my poetry, if you would check. :)

 
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EllieMae said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 7:02 pm:
This is so lovely. I was hooked from the beginning. Your ryhtme and emotion portrayed is flawless. Very nice work.
 
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thefamoustapper.... said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 3:20 pm:
I'm truly speechless...in a good way.
 
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ElleNicole said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 10:58 am:

Love it.

I need more feedback, I was wondering if you would rate/comment on my work... thanks if you do and keep writing. This piece is a treasure.

 
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savetheplanetThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 12:12 pm:
u combine rhyme with meaning which is what i love about this poem
 
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ExpressWithinYouOut said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 3:24 pm:
love your poem .... very good
 
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lifeloveyou1919This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:26 pm:
you inspired me to write poetry thank you so much.
 
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maki_rainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 19, 2011 at 11:29 am:
This was really good. I liked the flow. I think the last two lines are my favorite tho.
 
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faerest said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 2:07 pm:
this poem is soooo sad, its not a happy ending, but happy endings are what we're used to (well at least i am)...
 
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HisPurePrincessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 25, 2011 at 2:04 pm:
Yep it's a beautiful poem, and I really like it.  I just don't know why my poem "Just Thinking" won't get published.  I think it's as good as this is.  Sorry, yours is really good, I think.
 
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LifeIsButAPoem said...
May 6, 2011 at 10:12 pm:
Fantastic.
 
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PAOLA-ARLETTY said...
Apr. 25, 2011 at 8:48 pm:
wow, this poem is honestly fabulous! I can see myself relating to it one day, when i go through a similar story!  I honestly think this poem is great!  keep up the good work
 
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alwaysadreamer said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 9:49 pm:
truly gifted! =)
 
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Debbie1This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 5:05 pm:
Wow! this was really good! Well written, and kinda emotional. love it!
 
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forgottenpennameThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 12:23 pm:
Love it... I like how it starts out all happy cheery and all that and by the end it's like a splash of cold water in the face; reality. Fantastic job on this! :)
 
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RFarage said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:25 pm:
Great comparisons, great poem. (: !
 
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kvater said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:14 pm:
i really liked how they compared it to cinderella
 
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SierrahThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 6:22 pm:
amazing :D
 
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