Roses

March 29, 2010
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"


Swirls of black smoke
rising in the air
our world's gonna choke
and we can't let it get there
imagine the light
imagine the wind
stand up and fight
for what you believe in
we've only got one shot
and we can't miss
so hurry before our blood clots
chances are slim but we can do this

A single black rose
in a field of red
begins to close
because it is dead
she dies alone
black in the colour
the path, it was shown
into the world of another
in the land of make believe
nothing is as it seems
you shall hardly be relieved
because it is the land of dreams
this is what I believe in
an entire world without sin

Roses painted on the walls
it feels so wrong
to walk these empty halls
where there used to be love, dance and song
so I dream what is real
and what is real shall become a dream
tis no longer what I feel
tis no longer what I mean

A single black rose
in a field of red
begins to close
because it is dead
she dies alone
black in the colour
the path, it was shown
into the world of another
in the land of make believe
nothing is as it seems
you shall hardly be relieved
because it is the land of dreams
this is what I believe in
an entire world without sin

A single black rose
in a field of red


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on Sep. 23 2017 at 12:08 am
HereSheIs BRONZE, Wellesley, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"We can easily forgive a child who is afraid of the dark; the real tragedy of life is when men are afraid of the light." -Plato

I love your word choice, images, and tone, but I feel like this poem could do even better if you didn’t try to stick to a rhyme scheme

on Dec. 3 2010 at 7:39 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

Thanks:)  this one is my most read piece

on Dec. 3 2010 at 11:13 am
ohxXxEkkoxXx GOLD, Sanatoga, Pennsylvania
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I love this it flows well and is amazing you're a fantastic writer

on May. 19 2010 at 1:31 am
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

thank you for your feedback:)

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 12 2010 at 11:14 am
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

SIMPLY WONDERFUL AND TRULY TOUCHING :)

on Apr. 29 2010 at 8:34 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

thank you so much!!!! I'm happy that people actually like my work, a lot of the time it just seems so depressing though.. i'll check your stuff out right now:) thanks:)

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Apr. 29 2010 at 5:27 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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i just got done reading most of your work. you are a brilliant writer i have never been through your situation never expierienced your loss but your lonliness and pain you felt i understand. please check me out :) im hoping to get my deeper stuff put up when i do ill comment you :0 once again great work and keep writing

on Apr. 21 2010 at 7:58 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

 thanks:)

on Apr. 21 2010 at 4:37 pm
lifeisajourney GOLD, Coronado, California
18 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is a journey not a destination..."
"Perhaps our eyes need to be washed by our tears once in a while, so that we can see life in a clearer view again."
"Only those who will go too far, can possibly find out how far one can go"

it was amazing

on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:52 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

sigh... yeah.. i sure hope so.. thanks for caring   can you check out my other stuff plz??

Lizzi19 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:38 pm
Lizzi19 BRONZE, Mechanicsburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
“You know you're in love when you can't fall asleep because reality is finally better than your dreams.” Dr. Suess

your welcome. and i'm sorry to hear that. but if it helps any, i'm sure she is happier now

on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:30 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

thanks guys!! will do:)

on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:30 pm
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
48 articles 0 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

thanks so much!! it was for my cousin.. she passed two days ago... but she had cancer.... she never got to read it... that's okay.. thanks so much though!

Lizzi19 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:05 pm
Lizzi19 BRONZE, Mechanicsburg, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You know you're in love when you can't fall asleep because reality is finally better than your dreams.” Dr. Suess

wow. that was absolutely amazing.. :)

on Apr. 20 2010 at 12:12 am
Frog-Prince PLATINUM, Lakeside, California
33 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Peace is not the absence of conflict, but the ability to cope with it"

i love this poem! Will you please check out some of mine? =)

on Apr. 19 2010 at 10:50 pm
hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
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Your poems are getting consistently better. It's a beautiful poem and potential song. I am sure Ashley will love it


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