When You're Gone

February 7, 2010
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In a veil of tears I see you
lachrymose in acrid despair too.
You melt to a consoling smile
when console should i give to you.
For as you let the cool pallor
gleam from your smooth face in the gloom,
my fingers shiver in your hand
for I faintly hear, "I'll see you."

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Milo! said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 4:15 pm
What a great piece. It’s so understandable. You made it really easy to see where you’re coming from. I hope you keep writing, because this is really good. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.
dreamer_believer said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 12:48 pm
whoa. im almost blown away by this! all the raw emotion you captured is...it's just amazing! i love everything you described in this poem :) it's beautiful....5 stars ;) would you mind checking out some of my work? i would love your opinion :) oh and please keep writing!!
TimLeon. replied...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 8:31 am
thanks very much. I'll definitely comment on your work!
goodbyegirl said...
Feb. 17, 2010 at 11:59 pm
One of the best!!!
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