When You're Gone

February 7, 2010
By TimLeon. BRONZE, Hong Kong, Other
TimLeon. BRONZE, Hong Kong, Other
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Art is a human activity whose purpose is the transmission of the highest and best feelings to which men have attained.”


In a veil of tears I see you
lachrymose in acrid despair too.
You melt to a consoling smile
when console should i give to you.
For as you let the cool pallor
gleam from your smooth face in the gloom,
my fingers shiver in your hand
for I faintly hear, "I'll see you."



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Milo! said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 4:15 pm
What a great piece. It’s so understandable. You made it really easy to see where you’re coming from. I hope you keep writing, because this is really good. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.

on Feb. 24 2010 at 8:31 am
TimLeon. BRONZE, Hong Kong, Other
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Art is a human activity whose purpose is the transmission of the highest and best feelings to which men have attained.”

thanks very much. I'll definitely comment on your work!

on Feb. 21 2010 at 12:48 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

whoa. im almost blown away by this! all the raw emotion you captured is...it's just amazing! i love everything you described in this poem :) it's beautiful....5 stars ;) would you mind checking out some of my work? i would love your opinion :) oh and please keep writing!!

goodbyegirl said...
on Feb. 17 2010 at 11:59 pm
One of the best!!!


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