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I wrote your promise on my hand.
I hope it lasts.
I hope it stands.

And if somehow I lose my way,
I'll check my hand
and be okay.

When I wrote your promise
on my hand,
I wished it'd last.
I thought it'd stand.

Yet oddly now,
it's rinsed away.
But you're still here.
I'll be okay.

And don't you worry.
It helped me out.
More than you know.
Without one doubt.



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skybeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 16, 2012 at 7:44 pm:
Nice! Great rhythm..... (Please comment/rate my stuff!  :))
 
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HazyeyesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 17, 2012 at 4:47 pm:
i like the rhyme scheme, and rhythum! This poems pretty good! (please read, rate, and comment on my stuff!!!!)
 
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irishlass317This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 11:45 pm:
WOW. The rythm was very, very good. This is a poem I can definitely relate to!!!!!!!!!!! I love it!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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HollerGirl26 said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 2:32 pm:

The rhythm makes the poem..really good job <3!

 

 
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k.s.hThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 7:59 pm:
It was very sweet and symbolic.  The rhythm touched the meaning of it to me.
 
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-DreamForever- said...
Jun. 24, 2011 at 9:13 pm:
I actually like this a lot because a while back a boy told me something that I really liked, so I kept rewriting it on my hand for about a month. Recently I've stopped, but seeing it every day like that has helped me a lot. 
 
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TheWriter14 said...
Nov. 10, 2010 at 6:21 pm:
woah. very extremely amazing. :) i realy like this it reminds me of a quote thing of myhotcomments.. it said like i wrote ur name in the sand but the wave washed it awya.. i wrote ur name on my hand but i washed it the next day. i wrote ur name in my heart, forver it will staay
 
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SwimChick said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 11:37 am:

Really liked this, a LOT.

 Extremely relatable, to an INSANE degree...LOVED IT.

 
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princess4ever said...
Apr. 28, 2010 at 9:15 am:
good work. I love it!
 
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Meghan M. said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 11:44 am:
i really like this poem it really does to relate to a lot of people.
 
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Venus_Queen said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 4:07 pm:
I loved it!!!!!!!!! ^-^ <3
 
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RinnyG. said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 1:14 pm:
Carly!!! This is great!!! I really wish I could write like you can girl!
 
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munkyman95 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30, 2010 at 5:23 am:
This is a nice poem.. good flow and a nice idea
 
Carly. replied...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 3:06 pm :
Thank you so much. (:
 
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ellenm34 said...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 5:20 pm:
This poem really spoke to me, and it shows me how much the relationship between you and the person this poem's for means to you. I love this, and I've read some of your other works and you're really good! Keep it up, and I'm sure your writing will get you somewhere. :)
 
carly... replied...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 7:09 pm :
Thank you SO much. You have no idea how happy your comment just made me. Haha thank you thank you thank you.
 
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imaginewhirrledpeas said...
Oct. 17, 2009 at 10:17 pm:
this is really brilliant carly! i really hope that it gets published in the magazine
 
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Jordan_7 said...
Oct. 16, 2009 at 8:58 am:
CARLY!! i love you!!!!!! haha and you know me i have NO idea what this poem means but WHO CARES! it sounds cool lol LOVE YOU GIRL!!!! :)
 
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Sunflower said...
Oct. 13, 2009 at 8:46 pm:
I really like this poem of yours. I can see myself when I was a teen writing on my own hand! Keep up the good work. I'm proud of you. :)
 
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HarryPotter said...
Oct. 12, 2009 at 6:29 pm:
Course it's amazing. (:
 
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